The Deep

The Deep

A Poem by Einstein Noodle
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this is a lipogram i wrote for a class (same class the cinquaine was written for) the lipogram, for those who are unfamiliar with, is a poem using one vowel only. i chose "E"

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"The Deep"
The endless Ether
left deep clefts                                        
heed me
keep knees free
                                     enter the descent
                                                                     Hell's decree bends the rent
See me!?
Steep we creep
Spent.
Endless Ether we flee
11/28/2018
E.

© 2019 Einstein Noodle


Author's Note

Einstein Noodle
I struggled to have a theme ... would really like to know if you have a sense of one .. :}

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It’s a different kind of creative joy when we are able to produce worthwhile expression within the limitation of format and structure. For me that’s the supreme kind of satisfaction. I read the endless twists, turns and bends as we navigate, crawl, hurtle through the all pervading ether to our ordained ends. Appreciated very much, E 💕

Posted 1 Year Ago


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DIVYA

1 Year Ago

Oh bedtime then! :)
GoodMorning hugs! And do grab a bit of sleep :))))
Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

headed that way now ;)
DIVYA

1 Year Ago

.......😉☺️😊.......



Reviews

Wonderful use of words. Each line with reason and a purpose. If we dance with the devil. The devil shall lead. Thank you Einstein for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

yes Coyote Man! we do not win taking on the devil ... once engaged we already lost :( then the shame.. read more
Coyote Poetry

1 Year Ago

I liked this poem and you are welcome my friend.
dear E... a beautiful Concerto of love in the waking and falling deeper in love. The clefts of romance are symbols of composing a dream come true. As ever, Pat

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

oh Pat! i love your review ...yes..the love bug is all you say isn't it ... our poetic minds and hea.. read more
Patricia Wedel

1 Year Ago

Yes... romance is the rising of the Sun like honey on a bun... sweet and content ...
The thing I like most about your poem is how you use double-e words quite a bit. Not sure if this qualifies as a theme, but if this were a song, this would certainly be your sweet note "eeeeee"! *smile* I admire you for seeking further knowledge & practice & community, in regards to your writing. You have a strong sense of community, when it comes to your approach to writing! *smile* Fondly, Margie

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

well Ms. Barley ... at least reading did not drive you screeming eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeek into .. read more
barleygirl

1 Year Ago

I am sitting at my computer with the lazy sun just barely clearing the ridge finally, to spill some .. read more
Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

awwwwwwwww .... i like the front ;) and some Bailey's ... its a golden moment with the sun on your b.. read more
Wow! This is thought-provoking. I read it a few times and it reminded me of our existence from cradle to grave, although that may not have been your intent.

I was reading where you reference increasing your vocabulary to stave off Alzheimer's and I recently found that coconut oil helps with this condition. Check it out! I take coconut oil capsules.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Tamara Beryl Latham

1 Year Ago

No, just take the capsules. Check out the information on Alzheimer's and coconut oil on google.
read more
Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

i will.... thanks Tamara!!
Tamara Beryl Latham

1 Year Ago

Happy New Year!
So creative Mr E. The layout of your words really enhanced the feelings I got when reading them. I felt I was taking downward steps into the unknown. Lipograms look very challenging to me. Just using one vowel must have taken some creative thinking. Not sure I would be up to this task. All good wishes.

Chris

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

it was certainly challenging ...trying to come up with something more than just words and a vowel ;).. read more
An impressive piece so precisely penned..may have to try this form later on..an apt title for this intense verse..I so like the hell's decent..and the ether effect within your verse..nice Work

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

thanks Fran...i'm happy you took the ride ;) it was a challenge for sure ... the limiting forces wri.. read more
Aloha E, so incredibly clever as is the form and narrative. There is a street type quality - dark & punchy word choices, even within this style which makes it even more impressive. I really like this and the song seems so very fitting - what a great choice. Mahalo, Izzy.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

Aloha dear Hippy!!! :) thank you for mentioning the song too! I appreciate that! it is a dificult fo.. read more
Wow you muse in sublime rhyme scheme here. Impressive format as well. It reads in great rhythm and intent. Kudos.

Soo nice to read from your inking again, pleez do comment/add your thoughts/ review my newest poem too. I like saying hi to poets and poetry.


Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

nice to meet you S .... i will definitely stop by your pages too!
E.
F*****g awesome. I think youre really close to a solid narrative. It looks like fun. Gonna try it tonight or tomorrow!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

hey Cyrano!! what a treat to have your visit ... and nice to meet you .... i feel pretty gratified b.. read more
CyranoDBergeron

1 Year Ago

Lol. Yeah I tried it last night with O. It was hard. You lose all your prepositions. So a solid narr.. read more
Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

i agree ... worth the effort :)
ether, the rarer regions of space is also what the poets of the 18th century wrote about exponentially. In fact it took another 200 years before man could write a love poem about his or her emotions. And readers could grasp those references and believe them....great poem....dana

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

wow! that's a rich history isn't it ... especially how long it took to be "proper" to write about em.. read more

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