A Poet's Cliche'd Lament

A Poet's Cliche'd Lament

A Poem by Einstein Noodle
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having a bit of fun ;)

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Layers of onion
Chisel granite outcropping
Rigormortis sets

© 2019 Einstein Noodle


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Einstein Noodle

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This is a remarkable tiny droplet of an idea that paints a huge portrait in my mind . . . how the icy mountaintops cause granite outcrops to flake off like onion . . . swirling with the idea of how layers of an onion being hardened into rigor-mortis could resemble a poet with writer's block trying to chisel off a few lonely words (is that what you're doing here? *wink! wink!*) Love it! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 5 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

yep..it sure is me dahlink Margie!! always tickles me innards to have your visits ... love on ya gir.. read more



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Nice. I like the feel of this.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

thank you for taking time Kathleen! glad you enjoyed my little bit of fun with senryu :)
E. .. read more
Nice photo and honest words. Good morning my friend from cold and icy Michigan.
Coyote

Posted 3 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Years Ago

thanks Coyote! Just a bit of fun with cliches .. the Vortex has most of the country in its grip .. s.. read more
Coyote Poetry

3 Years Ago

I am doing well in Michigan. Enough food, no place to go and Johnnie Walker and Crown royal keeping .. read more
Einstein Noodle

3 Years Ago

I'm out of my Kentucky Bourbon ;) but I still have a few days of beer in the fridge.
dear Gene.... love your Senryu... even a year later... even more.
I have grown in sensitivity.... and that is important. Now my mind
is fertile with fruity soil and ready for seedlings in the Spring.
Happy Valentines Day with memories. Love and Tapioca pudding.
tenderly, Pat

Posted 3 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Years Ago

we can all grow in sensitivity my friend .. i so agree with you. thanks for finding this one .. even.. read more
Patricia Wedel

3 Years Ago

Gene... ha ha... my Mother made Tapioca pudding by adding each delicate ingredient with a gentle "wi.. read more
Einstein Noodle

3 Years Ago

What great memories you have, Pat! Thanks for sharing them with me. A friend of mine had a mulberry .. read more
wow! very descriptive imagery here, nicely done

Posted 4 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

4 Years Ago

thanks kescha! glad you enjoyed!! :)
Peeling off skin
revealing marble bone
A hardness ...

Posted 4 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

4 Years Ago

that's about it Shazbatt! ;) thanks so much for taking time on me pages! :)
E.
Imagery and metaphor in search of a poem, that’s somehow a poem, a haiku, or representative of writer’s block, all in one.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

4 Years Ago

:) yep! spot on Max! thanks so much for taking time to read and review
E.
Such vivid impressions brought to mind here...The concentric-ness of the mind, the incessant thoughts running in circles, countless ideas forming, going nowhere and dying without a breath, leads to rigormortis, of the pen and of inspiration. For people who live to create and to write, this limbo is of death. I hope I could do justice to your thoughts and words, E...

Posted 4 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

4 Years Ago

oh my goodness dahlink! you have gone deep indeed! :) i am so humbled by your impressions ... you to.. read more
DIVYA

4 Years Ago

It’s always a pleasure E. A poem that makes the reader think, helping them derive relatable conclu.. read more
Einstein Noodle

4 Years Ago

i think we're on the same branch dahlink! ;)
Layers of onion steamed with desire... pealed
ever so slightly can be tender and sweet...
accompanied with a light wine and candlelight...
holding each other tight. truly, Pat

Posted 5 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

again you surprise me in such a fine way with your review .. i love onions ... raw .. they are so ve.. read more
Patricia Wedel

4 Years Ago

Onions and garlic with sweet green pepper sautéed with summer squash of different persuasions ... i.. read more
Einstein Noodle

4 Years Ago

mmmmmmmmmmmm i have never used nutmeg ... something to try says i!
Well,
With this crafty little Senryu, you've enticed me to have a bit of fun, too, trying to discern abstractness into simplicity
Hm? Let me see, and don't you dare giggle at my fumbling attempts … I never was a whiz at interpretation.

Layers of onion (like stacks of thought, feeling, emotion?)
Chisel granite outcropping (hardened creativity radiating-out?)
Rigormortis sets (Rigor mortis [two words] / writer's block?)

Synopsis (no laughing!): When writer's block sets-in, one's inner expressions quit flowing, and the only way to get to them is through arduous struggle and setting the spirit free, by chiseling-away at outside interferences.

There you have it!
The abstract verbosity of a literal mind … LOL!

I really dig that cool olde-time black 'n white mining scene.
Thanks, My Always Enjoyable Friend, for the light, fun entertainment! ⁓ Richard : )

Posted 5 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

yes..well... sometimes cliche's can take on flare can't they ... i confess that calling out to those.. read more
Richard🖌

5 Years Ago

Spot-on(?) … really!?
Now, I've got both thumbs hooked in my suspenders, stretching 'em out.. read more
Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

ahahahaha...me too now! ;)
almost a haiku poem !
sorry i didn't quite understand it at first, a bit too esoteric for my brain until i read barleygirl's review, then i got it!!
being short & succinct with words is not always easy, i think.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

its a senryu ;) or attempts to be .. i love both forms being a minimalist at heart ... i am so pleas.. read more

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