A Poet's Cliche'd Lament

having a bit of fun ;)

Layers of onion

Chisel granite outcropping

Rigormortis sets

Author's Note

Reviews

[barleygirl]

This is a remarkable tiny droplet of an idea that paints a huge portrait in my mind . . . how the icy mountaintops cause granite outcrops to flake off like onion . . . swirling with the idea of how layers of an onion being hardened into rigor-mortis could resemble a poet with writer's block trying to chisel off a few lonely words (is that what you're doing here? *wink! wink!*) Love it! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Einstein Noodle]

yep..it sure is me dahlink Margie!! always tickles me innards to have your visits ... love on ya girl!
E.

[lightsong]

and the poet will keep digging and digging in the "rocks" continue carving his "shapes" of poetry until his bones run old and crack... yes that's how poetry can be in life, the very essence of everything about us, or what made us, even our bones, bled into words, and that's how I read Your words Creative Poet Mr.E :)

[Einstein Noodle]

yes yes yes ..we do keep on chipping don't we ;) love your review Light ... gives me a big grin this morning
E.

[lightsong]

Yes we do, and You are SO very welcome E :)

[Cherrie Palmer]

Nothing more eye catching than the flashing of a neon light.
That is the image that springs to mind when I read power packed pieces like this.
You're clever coupling really works.

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you so much Cherrie ... i could not be more happy this "caught your eye" ;) peace and big joy sister!
E.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Is the picture yours or just a great discovery?

[Einstein Noodle]

just a great discovery ... i am not much for taking pictures ...my older son has a very keen eye for it tho ;) i guess i am old enough to have taken that one however :)))))))))))))))))))))))) thanks for checking it out Cherrie!

[Cherrie Palmer]

Lol, well I thought it might belong to your family. My grandpa was born in 1902 and I have some old pictures that belong to my family tree.

[Lydia Shutter]

So few words yet holding a lot of meaning. You are quite the artist, E. Layers of the onion...layers of thought...your words hold many layers of connotation for sure. Lydi**

[Einstein Noodle]

in the eyes of the beholder eh!? oh there i go again ;} i had a bit of fun writing this but i seem to wax thoughtful always ... thanks again for taking time to review me poems ... have a ball today! we're alive Lydia!!!! :))))))))
E.

[Lydia Shutter]

Indeed we are...and that is what counts!

[Moonie]

To me, the 3 lines speak of the 3 different approaches to writing. The first is when you've been blessed by the kindly muse, and one by one the layers of the onion are stripped off with fervour, as you watch the poem emerge from underneath, like a neatly tucked-in infant. Such instances are rare for me, but those rare times are pure bliss. And the poems that i write in such a trance seldom undergo much editing.
The 2nd line could talk of the poems where you really put in the effort, neatly editing and re-editing thousands of manuscripts to chip at the hard granite, and watch your masterpiece take shape slowly.
And alas the third😂... the infamous writer's block, describing writing as a slobbering and slow process, like a tedious mechanical workout, and the writer's block is the rigor mortis you have to overcome to get your arms to function.

[Einstein Noodle]

spot on Moon Girl! thank you for such a thorough and sensitive review ... my way of having a bit of fun with the process ... ;)
E.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Chiseling, chiseling- ouch!! Writing is like peeling onions- great on-point metaphors E.! Well, back to chiseling before the rigor takes me- ha! Love this Senryu.

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks for reviewing Annette ... yeah! it can hurt a bit ... the chiseling ;} love and peace always!
E.

[Onlyme]

The hardening of humanity and a stony heart. Needing a chisel to break into it's unaffected, unfeeling heart. So they might as well be dead.

[Einstein Noodle]

i know...it a rather bleak ditty isn't it ... but at least we do have our layers eh!?
E.

[Paul Bell]

I suppose if we chisel to the core we discover mankind.
That's definitely when rigor mortis sets in.
But we can't change it now.
Though, the Planet of the apes did a good job.

[Einstein Noodle]

love those apes ... and sure love the Planet as well! ;) thanks for reviewing Paul ..it's a tough go when we have to get the chisel out eh!?
E.

[Paul Bell]

Just need a bloody big hammer.

[Einstein Noodle]

:)))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))

[Stella Armour]

i see it now lol. nothing flexes when it has hardened and died....
Set like rock with no heart :(

[Einstein Noodle]

yes! some things die without the flowing waters of change eh!? thanks Stella .. so very much for giving this one thought and time ... it means a lot!
E.

[Stella Armour]

well, you know my friend how i struggle at times , :)

[An owl on the moon]

Three lines of brilliant, lingering life, layer by layer. You do have a way of making stone breathe!

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you so much Owly .. i am honestly humbled by your review ... so gratified you pealed away ;)read morethank you so much Owly .. i am honestly humbled by your review ... so gratified you pealed away ;)
E.

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Wow layered and sublime. Great in brevity. Kudos.

Nice to read from u again ,
Plz Pleez do comment/review my newest poem too

[Einstein Noodle]

i sure will S! thanks for the invite .. and i certainly appreciate your taking time and reviewing ... glad you found something in this one!! ;)
E.