Affairs of the Heart

Affairs of the Heart

A Poem by Einstein Noodle
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loosely generalized observations ;)

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Affairs of the Heart

For every man
who wins her heart
A man stands in shadows
torn apart

For every woman 
who finds her man
three are broken
unable to stand

Sunrise could not find him in  heart's shadow
No sharper edges wrought to cleave those bindings;
locking the pain with loss and despair
another had won her love. 

disregard replete; he moves
one to another, another; and another 
now in bliss, remiss of those memories,
he weds while broken stems alter Sunrise
no longer kissing their lips
hands only brushed the pearl of their veils now
fingered shards, shred them to shrouds 
three to cover each.

03/10/2019
E.


*the first two verses were one of those "flash inspirations" one has the tendency to think they are genius, only to throw them out when read later ..i know you all know what i mean ... but i didn't throw them out because it "felt" right .. so i added the second two verses ... trying to say the same thing in a bit different way ... would love to know your thoughts on them

© 2019 Einstein Noodle


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Dear Mr E. I found your poem moving. It also brought a memory back of an aunt by marriage I was very fond of. She really cared for me at a time my parents were 400miles away. I was young. She said to me to hang on to my man and look after him because there were other women round every corner waiting to prise him away. She wasn't wrong there, that's exactly what happened.

That loss is incredibly difficult to deal with, there was much pain and I sensed that in your lines you yourself understand that loss. Loving someone who doesn't feel the same way about you sucks. Sometimes you may meet someone else, but that broken trust shatters the heart and it takes one hell of a lot of glue to stick it back together.

Do not bin this piece. You have much to say here. This reader fekt your words on an emotional level.

Chris





Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

6 Months Ago

oh no Chris ... as i started to read your review i thought it would be a more happy story with your .. read more
Christine Anne Shaw

6 Months Ago

Hugs very gratefully received. I am so sorry for your loss. Your words have a universal appeal. Loss.. read more



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this is so sad really, emotional read....

Posted 1 Month Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

:( no fun to be on the loosing end of love for sure :( i am so happy you are checking out me poems k.. read more
I love the contrast between the style of the first two stanzas and the second two. It’s like you have a poetic intro and then lead in to the life application of the aphorism. There’s something Shakespearean about it, but more the plays than his poetry. Perhaps a lead in to a tragedy.

Great rhythm, too. It feels like it’s written metrically, but it’s too early for me to track it, haha. Maybe you think in iambic. It certainly feels smooth in the reading.

I really liked the two first stanzas. They set the tone and I think the understanding of the overall concept hinges on the information given there, so I’m glad you decided to keep them.

Another enjoyable poem from you.

Posted 1 Month Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

thanks so much for your thorough reading of this one .. i have a strong music background that may he.. read more
Broken sunrises

Broken sunrises🌞
of bitter love,

Warm sunsets 🌅
are getting easier
without you Baby!

Shattered veils
of broken wedding
vows...

Became broken
glass of a fragile
Heart.

You just weren't
ready to commit
to me,

You were a free
spirit that couldn't
be tamed.

It helped me
grow up,

I saw your
soul glow.

You became
that broken sunrise
that had to fix your
fractured heart,

Thank you for
your love because
you healed me.

All rights and
Copyright belongs to
©Benita-Staebell-M

2019August1


I see I've read this
piece but your poem
inspired me.

Posted 1 Month Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

love your "inspiration" Benita! its a perspective of one who lost the game eh!? thanks so much for s.. read more
Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet

1 Month Ago

Thank You my friend
Seems all my poet friends
Inspire me.
Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet

1 Month Ago

You're welcome 😊
So sad hearts living lost, and your piece does convey thIs.
I’m glad you saved the first two verses, they are a great lead-in, and since you asked, I think less cluttered thought than the last two.

Posted 2 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

hi Renee! what a treat when you visit and review my stuff ... and thank you for addressing the issue.. read more
Renée

2 Months Ago

Greetings E.
Please don’t change it on my account. But if you do, first keep an original co.. read more
Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

yes...they can be for sure ... having the experience is part of why we enjoy writing isn't it?! than.. read more
Excellent work with "Affairs", Einstein. I too have thought on such disasters as follow lowly humans around like lost puppies. You nailed it. For every happy heart, another succumbs to heartbreak. Life and love come with no guarantees -- so many people never learn that. I finally dropped out of the world's favorite pastime. Anything worth having hurts too much to leave behind. But, my own disappointments have helped polish up my metaphors for WC. Fav line: Sunrise could not find him in heart's shadow. This is a keeper. -- Doug

Posted 2 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

thanks so much bigfoot! you are very encouraging ... i appreciate it .. and so happy this struck tha.. read more
bigfootprint

2 Months Ago

It is wonderful to have someone you care more about than you do yourself -- I've been there. Bleakn.. read more
"You always hurt the one you love, the one you shouldn't hurt at all...' But hey, when one turns their back on you, who knows there might be better right round the next corner. Dust off and move on hoping you time will come, I say!
We live and learn and learn to live. Nice one!

Posted 3 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Months Ago

hi kitty!! thanks so much for stopping to read a bit .. and taking time to review .. which i love .... read more
kitty

3 Months Ago

Most welcome. Thank you for posting and acknowledging my review. I say many times we often don't kno.. read more
Einstein Noodle

3 Months Ago

yes kitty .. so true .. been there more than once .. and in loosing .. end up wanting all the more ;.. read more
How this one passed me I don't know, I am enjoying reading you

Posted 4 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

4 Months Ago

and what a treat that you are walking through some of me pages here ;) so glad you are enjoying .. p.. read more
The one that got away....I remember this like it was yesterday. The want and the lust followed by the "Oh no she chose some one else" This piece of poetry brought back some feelings of the past. Very well done.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

4 Months Ago

Troy! I am so happy this speaks as yesterday for you... needless to say .. i know what you mean ... .. read more
I literally loved your poetry, yes this makes me put myself in such a loss nd experience that pain


Posted 5 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Months Ago

hey Mustan! i don't think i have seen you on me pages before! thanks so much for the visit and i wil.. read more
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Einstein Noodle

5 Months Ago

thank you :) ..............
There was a particular girl I was fond of for years but it was wasted thoughts. She wound up with someone else and put me in the friend-zone. That hurts. I've gotten over it but I remember the feelings well. Don't delete any of this, it's all important.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Months Ago

oh man!! you too???? yes... that's one time the friend bin is not a fun place to be ... for me she w.. read more

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