Affairs of the Heart

Affairs of the Heart

A Poem by Einstein Noodle
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loosely generalized observations ;)

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Affairs of the Heart

For every man
who wins her heart
A man stands in shadows
torn apart

For every woman 
who finds her man
three are broken
unable to stand

Sunrise could not find him in  heart's shadow
No sharper edges wrought to cleave those bindings;
locking the pain with loss and despair
another had won her love. 

disregard replete; he moves
one to another, another; and another 
now in bliss, remiss of those memories,
he weds while broken stems alter Sunrise
no longer kissing their lips
hands only brushed the pearl of their veils now
fingered shards, shred them to shrouds 
three to cover each.

03/10/2019
E.


*the first two verses were one of those "flash inspirations" one has the tendency to think they are genius, only to throw them out when read later ..i know you all know what i mean ... but i didn't throw them out because it "felt" right .. so i added the second two verses ... trying to say the same thing in a bit different way ... would love to know your thoughts on them

© 2019 Einstein Noodle


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Dear Mr E. I found your poem moving. It also brought a memory back of an aunt by marriage I was very fond of. She really cared for me at a time my parents were 400miles away. I was young. She said to me to hang on to my man and look after him because there were other women round every corner waiting to prise him away. She wasn't wrong there, that's exactly what happened.

That loss is incredibly difficult to deal with, there was much pain and I sensed that in your lines you yourself understand that loss. Loving someone who doesn't feel the same way about you sucks. Sometimes you may meet someone else, but that broken trust shatters the heart and it takes one hell of a lot of glue to stick it back together.

Do not bin this piece. You have much to say here. This reader fekt your words on an emotional level.

Chris





Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

8 Months Ago

oh no Chris ... as i started to read your review i thought it would be a more happy story with your .. read more
Christine Anne Shaw

8 Months Ago

Hugs very gratefully received. I am so sorry for your loss. Your words have a universal appeal. Loss.. read more



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I agree your first two verses are genius, so I'm glad you didn't throw them out. It's becuz you are straightforward in a startling way . . . stating truthful observations we can all relate to. Then you go more into your nuanced way of embellishing, to flesh out your meaning as you go along, & I had to do a little more work to visualize everything you describe. Also, as one of the ones that LOVE has left behind, the nuances often get lost on me! *wink! wink!* Fondly, Margie

Posted 8 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

8 Months Ago

your reviews are always so important to me Margie ...simply because of our different approaches ... .. read more
The first two verses set the scene for just how painful love. can be..like a merry go round ..you love someone they love someone else..someone always ends up standing in the shadows of love waiting for a better outcome should they try again in this game of love..nice work E..

Posted 8 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

8 Months Ago

i know.... it can seem so unfair right!? :( its such a struggle and can be so painful ... but does w.. read more
it may takes years, even generations to meet and find Your true love, through that road You meet many experiences and though they might be unbearably painful sometimes,they are there for something or another, but the most painful thing when You are fully aware and with real belief of what's inside You, while Your love can't feel or know it, and You can't convey it to them either, it must come from their own inner, sometimes You wait for them for long times until they wake up...

Posted 8 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

8 Months Ago

yes yes yes Light!!! exactly so! i wonder sometimes how we make it through ... love on ya my friend .. read more
my generation were expected to marry young and have a family, that was the norm then, but now it makes sense that young love is passionate and burns out, better to wait and see than give everything to one person then find that someone else you had known was meant for you all along. Rejection, it hurts yes, but things happen for a reason sometimes ....

Posted 8 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

8 Months Ago

i am happy this sparked your wisdom Stella ... so true .. in fact i thought of a very young lady who.. read more
Stella Armour

8 Months Ago

it comes with age lol .... and i am an old thing now :))
Einstein Noodle

8 Months Ago

ahahaha me too...and loving every minute!!!
Well, Gene,
In as much that you asked for shared thoughts on this piece, and speaking technically -- to my thinking, in poetry (in particular) it's seldom ever a good idea to be too verbose (as in the final two verses), when simplicity is more effective, most easily understood, and enjoyed by one's readership.
Of course, it's never a reason for happiness to realize the one loved has chosen another, expressed so succinctly in the first two well-struck poetic verses.
Just my take on this piece -- and, I'm expecting a healthy discourse … smile*

Thanks, My Friend, for the privilege of honest critique, and for asking it of us! ⁓ Richard 🍃

Posted 8 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

8 Months Ago

so grateful for your critique always Richard ... i responded to you e-mail so will not repeat in thi.. read more
Richard 🍃

8 Months Ago

I was expecting flying shards … LOL!
That's one beautiful poem E.

Mmmm I read somewhere
Aren't we all ex of someone..
Heheh.... and yet to be lover of Some one else.. :p

Ah life never plays fair... guess if we knew all the end results then life wouldn't be intresting...
(Hugs)

Posted 8 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

8 Months Ago

spoken as a true life's warrior, Ardra! i am so happy to see you around me pages ... hope all is wel.. read more
The first two are genius in the same sense that genuine is real and inspired is visceral. The rest needs a tablespoon of Thousand Island or Ranch Dressing.

Posted 8 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

8 Months Ago

thanks for taking time Delmar! even as a child i only use Italian ;)))))))))))))))))
E.
this is an interesting set-up for you. Great to see you have taken a new road. I very much like this.

I like the flash of inspiration snippet at the end and I can fully understand where you are coming from - it's moment like these where I feel we are truly 'tapping in' to the connectedness of all, of everything - it's moments like these I wish we could drag out like the last of the sun on a perfect spring day.

and yeah - love - ha - it's complicated !!!

Posted 8 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

8 Months Ago

i know...it is a new road every now-when ;))) those "brilliant " snippets i throw out are as embarra.. read more
“Fingered shards, shred them to shrouds”- So dark, so true E. No bin should ever hide this poem. The number three so prominent, mysterious- the bell tolls three times for the unrequited love lost perhaps. The first two rhymed and rhythmic verses dramatically, symbolically set the scene for the ominous vignette that follows, the ghost-brides discarded. Loss leading to the sepulcher. “Nevermore.” Poe-esque, Blake-esque, E.-brilliant! Love this immensely.

Posted 8 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

8 Months Ago

oh my....Annette... your review touches me .. i am so humbled ... thank you so much ... funny how th.. read more
Annette Pisano-Higley

8 Months Ago

You are most welcome E.!
You know what popped into my head.
Your first stanza could be an opening for short romantic story.
Then each stanza that follows could do the same.
It could be about one couple and the wake their love leaves behind or a 'Love American Style' story with each stanza highlighting a new couple.
This poem overflows with life and cries to be explored.

Posted 8 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

8 Months Ago

thanks Cherrie! for taking time and your inspiring input!! i can see your points clearly ... lets al.. read more

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