The Maze

The Maze

frenetic winds like contrails 

whispering through the chambers

one man

one woman

turning twisting reaching

                                      rising 

falling 

hips sway lips say

unknown  -   invisible need moans  -

'round corners of unadorned halls                                                                           

virgin 

empty quiet apprehensions of

two minds tumbled out of a spin cycle

set at opposites 

THE DOOR! 

18 yr old boy ... 16 yr. old girl ...... 

facing flint and steel sparks in an instant fade from fire yet

deepening molten embers glow

true light to pierce the time

3/31/2019

E.

Escher's inspired stairs

Author's Note

Reviews

[Neville]

I dunno why but I just come over all emotional, and that aint like me.. I was hoping I might find something new from ya Gene, and blimey.. some find.. this must surely rank among my favourite poems of yours my friend... bloomin well done might sound like a cliche methinks, but tis part of me now and I sincerely mean, bloomin well done... Maybe I am beginning to feel my years and hanker after moments past.. but you sure got me this mane.... Am bound to revisit this page over and over... Neville :)

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks Neville ... your the brother i never had ;) and i am very happy this one has gone to the top of those you have read of mine .. i think it is a hallmark for me as the way i am inclined to write and my "voice" have found a foundation to hang from ... and my focus for writing has taken a bit of a turn ... love on ya buddy .. a real joy to have your presence here!
E.

[Neville]

all those things back at ya Gene and true..... and yes.. you do have a unique style & what a pleasure it is... N :)

[Eilis]

This spoke to me of the difference between infatuation and love—especially love that stands the test of time. As it were.

I love the idea of it being the maze because both states can create that sense of stretching the heart and the mind, but only the long love will lead anywhere meaningful. Of course, there’s a lot to be learned from infatuation. The growing pains and learning to understand our own minds and slow down and allow time to do its work. But, the maze of love that lasts offers surprises and opportunities that aren’t available in short term relationships.

It’s a cool concept. Maybe I’m way off base in my reading. But that’s how it’s looking to me today. I love the flint and steel idea. That’s quite exacting.

Great poem, E.

[Einstein Noodle]

Ellis ... you hit the proverbial nail squarely on the head :) thank you for this thoughtful and sensitive read of my poem on love ... i appreciate your time for sure!
E.

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

One of the best things about being young … the rapture that can give you wings … still soaring years later in memory when your bones are aching to move. To be swept away in such passionate bliss is a feeling that ever abides. Well penned.

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you Linda! ah yes ... we remember and we feel it eh!? passions blazing :))))))))) thanks for taking time and choosing to read this one ... peace and joy my friend!
E.

[Eugi]

Young and in love not knowing where life will take them next.

[Einstein Noodle]

that's about it Eugi ;) the best of times the worst of times eh!? :))
E.

[Lorry]

The maze, like eschers stairs are a mind melter to me E, which leads me to corridors and Chambers of the mind. Panic sets in as we grow claustrophobic within, looking for the door before breath expires.
It only occurred to me reading this how similar relationships and nightmares are. Are we doing it right? Is this the one? Needing to be a grown up and still being innocent and childlike. Woah! So much pressure.
Flames or embers, young or not so much, life, like thoughts, happen whether you are ready or not.
I do hope I have interperator this correctly and it's not really about letting someone on LSD decorate your home. Can you imagine bursting for a pee in that house? 😀

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahahaha that's a hell of a thought Lorry! oh my! you nailed my intent and more my friend .. thank you for reading and engaging .. yes... young or old .. it is true .. life will happen in bursts and surprises ... just when one thinks its safe to go in the water eh!? great review .. i feel pretty gratified sir!
E.

[Lorry]

That picture is the tongue twister for eyes 😀

[Einstein Noodle]

:) .........................

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

Sounds like they're so far apart
in love walking on different paths
how very sad my friend if they
want to be together.

fade from fire yet
deepening molten embers glow
true light to pierce the time.


Thank you for sharing

[Einstein Noodle]

and thanks for visiting Benita ... great you are hanging out at the Cafe' a bit more these days :)))
E.

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

I take breaks now in then
I've deactivated my Facebook
account media can drain you read moreI take breaks now in then
I've deactivated my Facebook
account media can drain you
and I was just getting in to read
some as tomorrow I'll be on a plane
to Iowa for 9 1/2 days because August
12 we come back I believe that's a monday.

[Einstein Noodle]

yes it can... having limits and taking breaks helps a lot ;)

[bigfootprint]

Real emotional page burner. This gem is terse, concise, and thorough in its exposition, with simple imagery and enough poetic treatment to elate the purist -- and you honored propriety. The mature love experience is great, but maturity has nothing on first times -- the nearest thing to eternal flame. You remind us all of the soul-wrenching moments of adolescence that still bring aftershocks. I have wondered just where the line lies between adolescence and young adult. I think that road might travel right through "The Maze." Excellent work. -- Doug

[Einstein Noodle]

Doug! i feel so completely gratified by your review ..you read it like i meant it ..what more is there in poetry eh!? thanks so very much for taking time my new friend! so you round the bend eh!? ;)
E.

[bigfootprint]

You are a visionary, Einstein. Pleased to count you as friend.

[Einstein Noodle]

back at ya! i live in the Ozark Mts. and it is said that there is a Big Foot highway nearby ... my wife and i have both heard them "knocking" on several occasions ;) see you around the Cafe' for sure!

[bigfootprint]

Bigfoot tales abound everywhere. My humble novel dedicates a chapter to my-up-close encounter.

[Einstein Noodle]

no kidding??? is your novel out?

[bigfootprint]

My novel: Growing Up Country A Hard Row to Hoe (Pen name Arthur F Wilson) available on the book sites like Amazon. The ISBN: 1524502650 Only like $4 for the ebook. Please me greatly and post a review there. Thanks -- Doug

[LouBelle]

The Door! I think we can all relate at some stage to that panic stricken thought.
The maze - such a complicated and complex intertwining of emotions, layered with opposing thoughts and conflicting feelings. The winds continue to frenzy around the two as they whisper, turn, twist and reach, trying to navigate it all. It's really lovely, and I can sense the sadness expressed by Cassie. Mine comes from disappointment, having known this feeling, having such high hopes and having nothing come to fruition. I wonder if Cassie feels the same.
Laura

[Einstein Noodle]

ohhhhhhh that is so sad indeed .. for those who are left bewildered like that ... i was curious about that sadness because my poem ends on what i hoped to be a positive note .. tho the experience is tumultic ... we can learn and grow into what real love is ... selfless .. kind ... empathetic and unfailing ;) thanks you so much for stopping to read and commenting LauraKate! i appreciate it very much and have to get by your place ..here..at the Cafe' :))))))))
E.

[LouBelle]

I wonder if sometimes we let our hopes soar too high, with high expectations comes disappointment I'm afraid! A lesson I learned in my younger years, but I never truly let go of my ideals and maybe that's what is so melancholic about this for me. I'm not sure if the embers completely died out or if they're still burning deeply - which would be worse?! I cannot tell! It is lovely to read the positivity and feelings of nostalgia commented by other fellow reviewers. You are most welcome, it was my pleasure :)
Laura

[Einstein Noodle]

some things are very difficult to obtain closure on ...the heart...emotions can be very deceitful for sure ... and high expectations can be one of them ... i am old ;} and things i experienced that caused pain ... i think about now with great joy actually ... because of what it taught and wrought in me ... things in our character that can not be book learned if you know what i mean ... love on ya Laura ... sent you a FR ... hope to keep up a bit with your writing

[LouBelle]

Yes i see what you mean. Lovely to see the FR :)
Best wishes,
Laura

[KWP]

what I get from this is not sadness at all - it's life - natural young experimental urges.

its a funny thing the evolution of sex when one allows it - teenage sex is always so quick and fumble - the ability to turn that into something rather transcendental is firstly a want and desire to explore (in my opinion) I read a fact a while back that most women, when they have sex, don't orgasm - when I read that I said 'WHAT!!!' to me unbelievable. its the learning how to give, the learning how to fall right back and receive which leads us to those moments that lead us to glimpses of the eternal.

Oh dear and now I am thinking of my two teenage sons - each with their respective girlfriends - oh dear!!!

Love you always XXX this review was clearly a digression - but hey ho - what to do!

[Einstein Noodle]

KWP ...how ever grateful i am for your presence here at the Cafe' ... i agree 100% about what draws the sexes together .. and the big difference between youthful "heat" .. and genuine love .. the journey is arduous at times but the deeper we find ourselves involved .. the greater the reward for learning the lessons pain brings to us .. patience, tolerance, long suffering, Faith, ...pain counts far more than joy here on earth .. at least that's what i think .. and connecting sexual with the Divine .. is far to under taught ... your boys will be just fine, dear heart! after all ...look who their mom is ;))))))) thank you for reading and reviewing always ... its important to me

[Cassie]

Interesting write but kind of sad. I enjoyed

[Einstein Noodle]

can you expand on the sadness you felt? i am curious about that, Cassie ...
E.

[Stella Armour]

understanding your forst sensual emotions is indeed like finding your way through a maze, never quite knowing the right way forward and feeling unsure as to the rising heat that drives you on ... until, the damn bursts and the first real afterglow is the path you were inadvertently seeking..

[Einstein Noodle]

whew Stella! your review got me going this morning ;) yeah ... youth eh!? "it was the best of times, it was the worst of times" :)))))))))) love and peace my friend .. thank you for stopping .. top o' the mahrnin' to ya!
E.

[Stella Armour]

if only we could have the wisdom of age in our youth ... would that not be a wonderful thing?

[Einstein Noodle]

i'm not so sure about that Stella ...might take all the fun out of it :))))))))))))))))))))))))) like a roll-a-coaster on a flat line

[Stella Armour]

Hahaha ... maybe &(*.*)&