The Maze

The Maze

frenetic winds like contrails 

whispering through the chambers

one man

one woman

turning twisting reaching

                                      rising 

falling 

hips sway lips say

unknown  -   invisible need moans  -

'round corners of unadorned halls                                                                           

virgin 

empty quiet apprehensions of

two minds tumbled out of a spin cycle

set at opposites 

THE DOOR! 

18 yr old boy ... 16 yr. old girl ...... 

facing flint and steel sparks in an instant fade from fire yet

deepening molten embers glow

true light to pierce the time

3/31/2019

E.

Escher's inspired stairs

Author's Note

Reviews

[Neville]

I dunno why but I just come over all emotional, and that aint like me.. I was hoping I might find something new from ya Gene, and blimey.. some find.. this must surely rank among my favourite poems of yours my friend... bloomin well done might sound like a cliche methinks, but tis part of me now and I sincerely mean, bloomin well done... Maybe I am beginning to feel my years and hanker after moments past.. but you sure got me this mane.... Am bound to revisit this page over and over... Neville :)

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks Neville ... your the brother i never had ;) and i am very happy this one has gone to the top of those you have read of mine .. i think it is a hallmark for me as the way i am inclined to write and my "voice" have found a foundation to hang from ... and my focus for writing has taken a bit of a turn ... love on ya buddy .. a real joy to have your presence here!
E.

[Neville]

all those things back at ya Gene and true..... and yes.. you do have a unique style & what a pleasure it is... N :)

[Lydia Shutter]

Hormones race through both parties and the fun begins. Not sure what to do, but they figure it out. Ah, young love. Your words are wonderful.....brought me back to another time. Always have loved that song and Escher was an amazing artist! The entire package is just wonderful, my friend. Lydi**

[Einstein Noodle]

oh yeah those hormones :)))))))))))))))))))))))) the rage of the age eh!? ;) your review gifts me a big smile this morning Lydia!! thanks so much!
E.

[Lydia Shutter]

You are so welcome, Gene.

[Mrudula Rani]

An amazing poem, stars meandering sentiments through the maze of memories a kerfuffle. Wonderfully unique as usual, E.

[Einstein Noodle]

it needs some stars meandering doesn't it?! ;) and yes a kerfuffle for sure (i love Judge Judy ..its one of her favorite words i think) so glad you stopped by for the experience my friend .. thank you for reviewing!
E.

[Mrudula Rani]

It is always a great pleasure to read your writings and learn from you, dear E.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear E... I recently saw Contrails were in a blue sky when the Sun was setting with a persimmon glow... it took my breath away. When I was young, I would cry because I had a Crush on a guy and it hurt so much. There was never a touch, but the passion was intense. The boys suffered a lot... religious schools mess with your mind. As we become older and bolder there is an art to love as fire like a brilliant sunset. Your poem is like striking a gold mine for which I file a Claim. truly, Pat

[Einstein Noodle]

i think i love you Pat

[Patricia Wedel]

Persimmon sunsets leave us breathless ... x

[Richard🖌]

"Young Love" (First Love)
"We will vow to one another
there will never be another
love for you or for me"

Ah, how can we ever forget the sizzling hormonal passion of our first love, all we learned and shared emotionally, even physically for some … one of my very favorite songs to sing and play. I still often hum, whistle, or sing the melody when working.
And, what a beautifully apt song choice it is, lending atmosphere to your deeply meaningful, heart-touchingly creative poem. Most of us, I am sure, will relate with tender wistfulness, of our blossoming moments' sweet memories.
Original, imaginative, and skillfully displayed, in your own unique style … what more perfect illustration to the labyrinth of first love's intricacies could there be than the Maze of M.C.Escher's "STAIRS".

A most brilliant Free Versing presentation, Gene … truly! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Einstein Noodle]

i am so happy to have your review on this Richard ..tickled that the free verse did not fail your eye .. love is crazy aint it!?? ;) thank you for such an encouraging review my friend!!! peace and joy!
E.

[Richard🖌]

My words are but your inspirations, Dear Friend. : )

[gram linski]

The joys of being on the cusp of adulthood, trying to navigate the maze of child and man, knowing what you want but maybe not how, loved the Escher picture, one of my favourite artists, his jigsaws are hard going

[Einstein Noodle]

yes they are ... could stare into them for too long ;) and yes! the cusp of adulthood ... what we go through during those tempestuous years ;} i wouldn't go back for any amount of additional youth ...no not me!! ;) glad you stopped by my friend! top o' the mahrnin' to ya!
E.

[TheSick]

This is incredible! I have so much to learn...
Great piece!
The poem is a maze but so is love.

[Einstein Noodle]

yes it is isn't it ..oh that game of love!!! ;} in me elder years it has smoothed out and deepened ... i would never go back to those wild rides and mysteries of the mazes i encountered ;))) thanks for reading and reviewing Sick ... much appreciate that you enjoyed reading
E.
ps. great handle my new found friend! "Sick" ... love it!!

[emmajoy]

Your words are so special. Touching. Real. Magical. Memorable in how it might have been.. for me.

There was nothing as rich as you've so brilliantly laid.. He was my older brother's friend, twenty or so years older than me. He was kind.. made me feel visible. He'd never dare 'try it on', not with Josh's youngest sister! But sometimes he'd give me a little hug or pat my shoulder, only ever that. But, but, BUT one special day, he kissed my cheek and wished me a happy birthday and.. I was in love. Still remember the oddly bubbling yet numbing feeling. There's never been a moment as sweet as that. Yet!

Your words are truly real as reality can be.. Memories lie sleeping so often, almost but not quite hidden. And those are the memories we need cherish, don't you think

[Einstein Noodle]

i can feel your blush Em!!! how marvelous you are!!! thanks so much for reviewing and sharing your wonderful memory ... the first time i kissed a girl was in kindergarten .. she was a blonde .. your big brother sounds like a keeper ... that protection goes a long way doesn't it ;)
E.

[Ken Simm.]

I find this very visual Gene. I could actually see it. I could see the way it should be lit and almost who I would cast. The type anyway. This is a real tour de force. Well done my mate. Extraordinary piece. Love the way it is set out as well.

[Einstein Noodle]

couldn't hope for more than to have the scene seen and characters in place ;) thank you very much for this encouraging review my friend ... peace and joy to ya always!
E.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

The opening lines are an absolute draw into this twisting tale. Young love at it's brightest perhaps, only to end inevitably, leaving only burning recall?

[Einstein Noodle]

ohhhhhh my friend ... super happy those lines hooked you ... truly!! yes ... young love indeed .. and who knows ... perhaps at a later age as well ;)))))))))))))))
E.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Rogue!!!!!

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahaha proud to be if i am :))))))))))))

[Chris Shaw]

Neville's visit directed me here Mr E. I am glad of that because those mazes in the mind lead us to some pretty revealing places. I saw young lovers here in the throes of passion and I was reminded of my first love, all that adventure, all that heat transported from years ago. So fresh in my mind, I can smell the sweat on his skin and feel his touch on my cheek. I am more than happy about that, he died at twenty six. You have evoked much emotion in me this morning. A great write, to do that.

Chris

[Einstein Noodle]

Christine!!! to have this poem bring thoughts to you of your first love is so gratifying to me ... you are a sensitive and honest poet and reviewer, me thinks, and that you relate personally with this one makes me pretty happy ...first loves .. oh my .. how i hope and pray we all have them .. and keep them fresh in memory ... the beginnings of a crazy adventure eh!?
E.