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i Want

i Want

A Poem by Einstein Noodle

“There is an ocean in the middle of the forest.” “Say what, now?” “An ocean! In the Forest, right in front of you! See? There’s a whale! A whale!” “Oh wow,”

i Want
i want your eyes to speak as
hands that grace lilting southern magnolias ...a
tensile tenuto .... a
leaving of finger tips  stars tracing
i want
hot cocoa and ground red pepper
your hair alive with
emeralds  streaming seaside pearls
that sacred place
i want 
breath to my life 
and drinking
each from one dawn to another
impaling our thoughts ..........a
soul quenching,  wanting  thirst 
i want you.
E.
11/29/2019

© 2019 Einstein Noodle


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Einstein Noodle

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I really like the way you mix ideas here. The sensual alongside symbols of comfort. The emeralds and hot cocoa (albeit spicy :D). These juxtapositions speak to me of a greater depth than just a physical want. The soul wanting another soul intertwined with it perhaps.

Sometimes it’s not possible to get close enough. There are distances even in closeness that make it difficult to feel a complete sense of satisfaction.

But your poem reaches. That tenuto is inspired. What a lovely way of thinking about it. Musicality and stopping time to hold on. At least that’s how it shakes out in my head.

This is lovely work, E. Love and desire do create beautiful landscapes in the head-heart. When we step back and let them speak without fear.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

your review hits every note Ellis .. i am blessed this reached you in all the ways it should .. than.. read more
Eilis

1 Month Ago

I look forward to reading your take on the idea, perhaps. You’re very welcome, E.



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This is a lovely piece with sweeping emotions and nice imagery. I love the image you chose for this


Posted 1 Week Ago


Einstein Noodle

6 Days Ago

me to Lyn! that suspended whale screams at me ;) thanks for taking time and finding my little love p.. read more
A passionate plea. Great imagery and use of metaphor

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Week Ago

;) Thanks Mom!
E.
goodness, this is exquisite, I can actually feel the tug in this desire filled decadent long tall drink, where are there any pieces in this puzzle? I usually have to think on it for a bit, I did have to look up tensile tenuto , love how you used that , and the "chocolat" recipe for desire and it delivers a straight forward
tense long note of wanting, just beautiful, love the photo

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Weeks Ago

you scooped up all i was trying to serve, Corset ... i could not feel any more gratified as a result.. read more
This poem speaks not only to want but the want of a mature man who has known true love and intimacy. I’ve seen how we evolve as we age. The want of physical love remains (ground red pepper) but sharing something deeper, the merger of two souls is the essence of love, and that’s what I read here. I enjoyed the image and music, too. I studied the image for several minutes, and I’m not sure if we see the same. I see an imaginative mind, one that not only imagines and creates poetry but love and magic from history and memories.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Weeks Ago

thank you sir...your comments are more than kind and generous .. makes me feel humble actually .. ki.. read more
R.E. Ray

3 Weeks Ago

You’re welcome. I always look forward to your new work. A true pleasure.
I love the combinations, the dichotomies in this love song. They go beyond mere passion and into something much deeper and dare I say it adult.
This feels, as I say, like a love song but one from afar. To another who is not there in the flesh as it were.
I could be way off beam however but I do like it. A lot.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

3 Weeks Ago

no...you are spot on my friend .. your read is sensitive and perceptive indeed ... feels pretty cool.. read more
A passion-filled write, full of the vibrance of life and a longing for all its beautiful things. To live to the fullest, with all the senses alive and to feel a oneness with another soul, these are the things that make it all worth it. You touch all the vital aspects of life here.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Weeks Ago

aww thanks Divya! you made me day that this spoke to you in such a way ... luv on ya! Best Happy New.. read more
DIVYA

3 Weeks Ago

My pleasure dear E. Happy New Year to you & yours too. All great things are wished your way, my frie.. read more
My Mother told me i want, can't have! Nice write Gene and merry xmas to you and yours.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Weeks Ago

same to you sir!! and many many more to come .. thank you for the read and review always ... Mom's k.. read more
'.. i want .. breath to my life .. and drinking .. each from one dawn to another .. impaling our thoughts. '

There's magic and mystery here: a marriage of both the need for spirit - and body. You ask though perhaps would like to demand.. but, you don't and - that highlights such incredible desire. Your love.song (for surely that's what this is, coming from the depth of your Self) holds the most sensitive, adoring words meant to wrap the beloved in absolute truth.

Posted 4 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

emmajoy

3 Weeks Ago

Know the feeling well! Am on dry days til new yea';s eve if you mean that kind of 'tipsy'! Niece, a.. read more
Einstein Noodle

3 Weeks Ago

ahahahahaha thanks for a fine chuckle for me dahlink! no.... i meant tipsy as in trying to balance d.. read more
emmajoy

3 Weeks Ago

Laughing, means same when trying to keep upright!

One of my new year's resolutions: .. read more
This is so tender, so beautifully voiced, creating a sacred space of love. There is a longing that awakens the heart and soul to all that is joy... all that fulfills a life. Wondrous.

Posted 4 Weeks Ago


Einstein Noodle

4 Weeks Ago

i feel pretty gratified this spoke to you the way i meant it to read ... thanks so much for visiting.. read more
Your descriptives here are so beautiful where do you get your inspiration beautiful loved this one thanks 🙏

Posted 4 Weeks Ago


Einstein Noodle

4 Weeks Ago

i feel so gratified and happy you enjoyed reading and that it sparked your imagination ... inspirati.. read more
Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)

4 Weeks Ago

Happy Xmas and safe healthy new year to you as well thanks 🙏

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