Butterfly

for a comp these were the ten words create pattern twirl window butterfly senses breath tea light bare

Butterfly

You take flight

Into the light

Your patterned wings

No longer by the window

You twirl and prance

Creating your dance

My senses kick in

I draw a breath

My tea is cold

My bare arms colder still

Goodbye

Butterfly

Author's Note

for a comp i know its not great

Reviews

[rachylou]

goodbye butterfly :(

[~Blue Fantasy~]

I like it! It's like you are just watching the butterfly, afraid to move...you dont care if your cold or your tea is cold you just want to watch before it goes.

[Freeminded]

I love the idea- though I feel it could be improved- come back to the poem in a month- you'll see what needs redoing etc

[Sophster300]

Love it! Great use of imagery created within this write :) well done rachi :D x

[Helena]

Well I beg to differ rachi52! I loved its simplicity and imagery you painted with your pen. Thank you so much for submitting this to the "Ten" contest. Helena :)