Tick Tock

This poem was another treasure I found in my old planner. I remember I wrote this because I couldn't sleep and I felt the silence deafening me.

The city lights wait, the city lights call out my name;
And I hear voices and sounds in my head-
A ticking of a clock fast-forwards as I lay in bed.
I look at the clock but it's not the same
The other ticking is driving me insane.
I stand up, I can't stay here.
No, not when everything's unclear.
I got to run, run far away,
Set out even without a place to stay.
The adventure is calling me,
And I don't wish to disagree;
But as I was about to stand up,
I woke up.
It was all but a fantasy.

Reviews

[Devons]

Nice. This is an interesting slice of subliminal thought. Of the unreal world encroaching on the real. To me, it shows how dreams can often be interpreted as messages from the soul that are seemingly pointing the way - assuming we can interpret them properly. The overall impression I got was that -in this case- the dream was telling the dreamer to get moving, life's short; whatever the drawbacks and consequences. But, since it is only a dream, the implication is that the dreamer can only dream of being so reckless - and probably never will.

Intriguing and a good subject. I'm always drawn to the ticking clock motif and the power of time.

NB. Technically, I would say that it could be tightened-up a little in places, in terms of its overall scanning sheme; to make some of the lines sit better together.

[Alicante lullaby]

dreams are queer things.

[Wake Up!]

I love it, mostly because I can most definatly relate. Adventure calls to all of us, but very few choose to acknowledge it. And fewer still take action. I absolutly love this one, you're best *that I've read, I still have a lot more to go =]* XOXO,

Ridgy

[DevinPerkins]

Maybe you should listen and take action to your fantasy. Show what praxis really really is.

[Samuel Dickens]

Of course I'm not a psychologist, but it seems your spirit feels tied down and you yearn for adventure, or at least, excitement. It's good to express such feelings.