My Heart Is Still Yours

My Heart Is Still Yours

A Poem by Radrach23
"

about a bad breakup

"

i need

need to be loved

by my family and friends

just isn't enouh

 

 

 

i need to have the feeling

that someone loves me

 

to breathe

to live

someone with mutual affection

with stuff to give

 

need to feel wanted

need to feel better than this

so sick and tired

of spending my day pissed

 

at the world

for taking my love away

i need them back

to stay

© 2010 Radrach23


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Author's Note

Radrach23
yeahhhhhhhhhh ignore gramatical issues and tell me what you think

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I like the rhyming scheme. Good emotions.

Posted 9 Years Ago


I find this too direct, and the words not chosen well enough. Confusing changes in plural or singular, and "stuff" isn't a very poetic word.

Posted 9 Years Ago


very unique but very good job

Posted 10 Years Ago


The rhyming scheme was pretty good.

Posted 10 Years Ago


i like how simple this is. its true, sometimes love from your family or friends just isnt enough, you need someone special. and its hard to get by when they leave. overall, amazing write :D

Posted 10 Years Ago


I feel you in the words as many of us I am sure could relate. You simply capture all that emotion is just few words. Thanks for sharing.

Posted 10 Years Ago


simply put, your going through some tough s**t. I get that. a little advice, don't be afraid to keep on living and sometimes walk this world alone, sometimes what hurts the most is for the better and just leads up to this magnificent neosporin drenched bandaid that will make everything okay in the end ^-^
It'll get better for you my dear, hang in there.
-Aiden

Posted 10 Years Ago


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... it can't be easy and it's not ... your writing style is lucid as always and earnest to the core ... it's hard to let go of people we love ... and their memories always haunt us ... it's undoubtedly exceedingly painful ... a good verse ... well-written ...

Posted 10 Years Ago


i love the emotion put into this piece. Losing someone you loved is such an awful thing to go through but eventually you will realize it was probably for the best. Anyone on this page can relate to this. Great job!

Posted 10 Years Ago


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you have an interesting writing style that seems to adapt with each piece that you write. I love reading your poems. Keep up the good work!

Posted 10 Years Ago



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