My attempt at an epic

My attempt at an epic

A Poem by Radrach23
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epic: an extensive, serious poem that tells the story about a heroic figure.

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To save the world

One person at a time

Is a dream

Of mine

 

To be the hero and help

To people who had my past

I wonder how I would feel

And how long it would last

 

Being a hero

Is one tough job

You might save a million people

But on the inside, sob.

 

The hero is always

Prepared to fight

To stand up

For what is roght

 

They will risk

Their life

To save one

Life yours and mine

 

I often have had the dream

That I was the heroine

But to save the world

Would it be a sin?

© 2010 Radrach23


Author's Note

Radrach23
its not exactly an epic but it kind of is.... right?

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it was good rach but i dont think anyone can be a hero if you look at it in that serspective

Posted 9 Years Ago


I thought an epic was more like telling an adventure story through poems, but this was good, too. I liked the last stanza the best.

Posted 9 Years Ago


To be the hero and (to) help

To(Maybe remove this 'to') people who had my past

For what is roght (right)

This is a great little piece, almost an epic ;)
You had a great theme and you explored it well, although a little more exploration couldnt go astray. Maybe have another look at it and see if there is anything else you could say?
Well done.

Posted 9 Years Ago


very nicely done. very well written with good word choice and a nice theme to it. i love the ending it leaves you thinking. nice job keep it up :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


I like this and the question your poem asks. It really made me think about the happiness as well as mistakes a heroin could cause. Great and interesting write!

Posted 9 Years Ago


i think it was good but i think that it was a bit wierd becuase i did not really follow it that well but apart from that i though that it was quite good.

Posted 9 Years Ago


It's weird how all the stanzas except the third one has a rhyme scheme.

I don't really understand the last stanza.

And, ... if only we had a hero for our world, like the one described in this poem.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Ehhh...not really an epic. An epic is usually a long, narrative poem telling about a specific hero and their heroic deed. This is more like a poem on heroism.

But I do like the rhyming scheme, as well as the message in the poem. Also, like daydreamer54 said, you made a typo on the last line in the fourth stanza--I think you meant right, not roght.

Posted 9 Years Ago


This was good. It kind of reminded me of Beowulf a little bit. I love Beowulf. Anyways good write. Thanks for sharing. :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Would it be a sin to save the world... great question to ponder! And I think this line is the anchor for the rest of the poem... after all, if you save someone from themselves then you have robbed them of their ability to choose direction... surely a sin... anyway... enjoyed it... good solid piece!

Posted 9 Years Ago



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