My attempt at an epic

epic: an extensive, serious poem that tells the story about a heroic figure.

To save the world

One person at a time

Is a dream

Of mine

 

To be the hero and help

To people who had my past

I wonder how I would feel

And how long it would last

 

Being a hero

Is one tough job

You might save a million people

But on the inside, sob.

 

The hero is always

Prepared to fight

To stand up

For what is roght

 

They will risk

Their life

To save one

Life yours and mine

 

I often have had the dream

That I was the heroine

But to save the world

Would it be a sin?

Author's Note

its not exactly an epic but it kind of is.... right?

Reviews

[Dev]

"For what is roght" typo - right

"They will risk, Their life, To save one, Life yours and mine" - multiple things here. First of all, the use of "They" contradicts "One Hero" which is what your write signifies and it will sound better if you can rephrase the last two lines eg. - "To save one life of yours, and one of mine."

"That I was the heroine" I am the heroine would sound better - or so I think

Overall this is a very nice write. I like the way you question the want to be the superhero. You have clearly stated that it's not easy as pie either. Good job.

Devyani

[aftervision]

To be the hero and help

To people who had my past

I wonder how I would feel

And how long it would last

just this alone would have been enough my poet -- the rest was just a bonus

[Nyida Strong]

This feeds off something a great man once said, "There is no greater gift then for one to give his life in place of his friends." To save people from the fate that we ourselves have been dealt is the one way we can feel as though our pain wasn't in vain. Whatever happened to us, we want to safe someone from feeling that bad, from wanting to end their own lives as we feel. This is a great piece, well done!

N. Strong

[...]

... yeah ... it kind of is an epic ... it's a very sensitive and moving poem ... it's tough to be a hero ... it's tough to save a million people ... and i've felt too ... that superheroes are really sad and alone inside ... and i do think that saving the world wouldn't be a sin ... because the superheroes always get rid of the bad guys ...

... i liked the skillful usage of simple words that you're so good at ... very inspiring ... you always manage to say a lot with very few words ... :) ...

[Katie L]

yes your right it's kind of epic

[Allison]

It's really good!!!

[Rawr!!XD]

This poem, in its own way, is an epic indeed. I've had the same dream, to save my friends and family and such.....but in reality I can't even save myself. Great write, definitely an epic. :)

[Katie]

This is intense! I love the whole 'hero' aspect of this. Great job!

[jjjjjjjjjjjjj]

good

[TheAdventOf]

It's an interesting take on the idea of a hero. They're always portrayed as this emotionless, kinda happy person, but here we get to see a different perspective of a hero, and that's pretty cool. Keep up the good work!