"Old Guitar Thing"

I played it, yet it didn't reach you.

Twisting peg for tuning

Facile strum of the string

Sharp, major to minor, A to G

Sound of notes comes to flee

Yet anguish will remain

Even our theme song starts to end

For irrevocable fate grasps no change

And like the notes, you’re out of range

On this rocking chair, unable pull love’s string

So, I’m alone with my old guitar thing.

 

 

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

Your poem is fine-tuned like a great sounding guitar. Bravo...:)......

[Rache David]

thanks.. :-).. you know what.. your poems are great. What inspires you to write all of that?

[Sami Khalil]

God, nature, His creation, history, love for the written word and art in general and many more. Grazie Mille...:).....

[Rache David]

ah i see.. hehe.. who's grazie mille? Your wife?

[Rache David]

ah i see.. hehe.. who's grazie mille? Your wife?

[Rache David]

Sorry.. hehe..is grazie mille 'thank you' in italian.. :-)
I didn't know .

[Sami Khalil]

:)...........

[Rache David]

Sorry for being stupid sometimes.. ;-D

[Sami Khalil]

:).....................

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

I envy those who are really good in playing guitar. Since I am a composer, I needed an instrument so that I can give life to my compositions. But the problem is, I am a small person, so my fingers are not long enough that I find it hard to press the strings of the guitar. lol. My solution? I bought an electronic keyboard and until now, I can use it in my compositions.

Lol. Sorry if I made a story-telling here in my review.

Back to your poem, I like the flow. Well-written!

[Rache David]

It's nice to know your story.. :-)
Thanks for sharing.. At least you've found the instrument that suits you.. and im glad you liked my work.. :-)

[Shogun]

Nice and short. I love the emotion drawn from the words, and it just fits in perfectly. Wonderful, wonderful work, I'm definitely checking out your other work. ^^

[Rache David]

Thank you so much shogun... i hope you will..
It'll be deeply appreciated.. :-)

[Duckey]

Such a beautifully simple poem, really well written. Love it!

[Rache David]

Thank you so much... i thought it wouldn't turn out good..really... thank you.. :-)

[Rache David]

This is just a simple one.. I'm not sure if you're gonna like this one..
Well, I'm hopeful you're still gonna read it... Thanks .. please enjoy..:-)