Walk Through The Haze Of Hell

Finding REAL love, after heartbreak and dark past

 

Written between the lines of my existence;
he read me like an open book
Chasing the curves of my substance;  
he understood my reasonable doubt
Behind the bends of my body;  
he felt me tremble beneath his passion
Tucked away in the corner of my heart;  
Were my REASONS not to love again…
Yet, HE found them!
Exposing my insecurities and fears
Ripping apart my hurtful path
Cleansing my spirit with his trust,
Erasing my soul’s secrets
The dark ones with noticeable scars
Those that held me captive; far too long.  
My empty cries of helpless hope
formed a small emotional trail,  
leading him back to my dark suburbia  
bringing my hidden truth to life,
confirming my past carried no power.
He mastered the quest of loving the whole me  
Guises used to camouflage my weaknesses...
he exposed them all beautifully,
and when mountains seem to get in my way;
he removes them one by one
When paths of pain weighs heavy on my legs;
he carries me through the thick
When life is at it's highest peaks;
He lifts me upon his shoulders…
just to see beyond the horizon
Now, I honor him with EXACT Love
For when he is facing Satan’s antics of life,
I’d walk through the haze of hell,
Gasoline pouring from the pores of my flesh
just to stand by his side
 
~RAIN~

Reviews

[ANTO]

Uber testament to love - that crazy notion that is here then gone like a firefly being eaten by a frog.
I loved the force of will in this - the sacrifice - to walk into hell - OMG!
I wish I had written this.
:)

[RainC]

.... sometimes we sacrifice without hesitation , for the one we love.Your comment just melted me alittle, thank you ANTO! ;)

[ms. barrie]

splendid write, beautifully composed, full of poetic eloquence,
enriched with amazing metaphors...a subtle sense of frailty, very sincere,
uplifting poem...thank you for sharing, RainC :)

[RainC]

Thank you for the poetic review, Barrie! :) This piece was about my husband and I meant every word. Pleased you enjoyed! Xo

[ms. barrie]

you're very welcome RainC...& very much so :) - xx

[jacob erin-cilberto]

so beautifully written...love's redemption...

the cleansing of the past because someone is brave enough to take us on, even with our past, our insecurities...our lack of trust...

and that person teaches us to love again.

beautiful.


jacob

[RainC]

Thank you so much Jacob for the sweet poetic love! Appreciate your encouraging words! Xo

[Nick Arouet]

Full to the brim with beautiful metaphors and phrasing. I think you have a real knack for description. I love the way you move through this poem, how fluid it seems to be. The way the stanzas are broken are perfectly placed. But, I suggest using italicization instead of capitalization to convey importance. When reading in your head, instead of putting emphasis on the word, as the intention is, it makes you just scream it out in your head instead of emphasize it. Lol. It can break the mood in a poem, I feel. Besides that, though, I really enjoyed this poem. It's very romantic, and you have a real knack for descriptions and metaphor! I wish I was as talented as you are in that particular department! :D

[RainC]

Thank you Nick for your observation and critique! Definitely considering your suggestions! Thanks again for the review! xo