As The Love Fades

as love fades

As i look into your eyes all i feel is pain

We used to to sync but now its just .. nothing

I wanted to be with you but thats before you left

you changed

like the clouds on a summer day

to winter snow

This may seem like a poem buts its what i call a story

Not reality or may be what it seems all i care is if it is me

Author's Note

:)

Reviews

[Aurora Lynn]

A good poem, I can feel the emotion coming right out of it! :) Over-all, it's a great poem. Just a few tiny errors.

It might help if you change a few grammar errors, like changing your i's into I's and capitalizing your letters at the beginning of a line. Little things like that make it a lot easier to read.

And although your last line is great, if you break it up into two lines it would flow a lot better. Maybe like this 'Not reality or may be what is seems/All I care is if it is me'

Other than those little things, and they are very little things, this is a great poem! Keep up the good work and you'll keep improving, poem by poem.

[panheadpigments]

Awww this is so cute :)

Really good poem.