War: A Threat to Humanity

This poems narrates a story and conveys a message to the people against war.

There was a kind man,

Soft and noble his soul was!

Before his eyes was a clear goal,

To recruit in army for a particular cause.

He wished to experience the scene,

The scene of the massive war!

So excited he was from the first day,

As the bitter reality was too far.

The day arrived with a bright sky,

Brighter was the man's curiosity.

He got ready with full of zeal,

Unaware of the war's brutality.

Standing steady at the frontier,

Holding his sword like a thunder bolt!

Both armies broke down at once

And suddenly the man came to a halt.

The bright sky puffed into cloud,

A cloud full of groaning dust.

Recklessly the bodies were falling down

And the war tragedy was at must.

 Bloody, bloody the battlefield was,

Filled with innumerable heads.

Screams and shrieks were just common

But there were none from death beds.

On a courageous path, the soldiers followed,

Each carrying a brave brave heart.

But on looking at the massacre scene,

The kind man astonished on his part.

Slowly, slowly the man comprehend

The cruelty of the massive war.

He bent on his knees at the once

And threw his sword very far.

He raised his eyes to heaven,

And cried in a very loud voice;

"Is this the humanity, my Lord?"

A sudden silence spread over noise.

At horizon a beautiful bird crossed,

The beautiful bird came out as a Dove.

Carrying the serenity over her wings,

Along with the message of peace and love.

The bloody sky lost down its lust

And a whiteness smeared all around.

The Dove seems like a messenger of God;

Sent down when he heard the cry and sound.

With her long and charming wings,

She covered the entire field.

The kind man was fully surprised

As a soldier gets his protective shield.

In a moment of vision, the field vanished,

A Dreamworld took its place.

The Dove took the kind man there

And there was a comfort on his face.

The Dove quoth to the man,

"Be kind, be peaceful or unless you will fall,

For God has made you people 

To praise him and love all."

The kind man understood the very message,

He swore to practice peace and harmony.

To walk long and preach all these,

Became his life-long ceremony.

 

Reviews

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

Wow- amazing- you are so right- God is a kind loving God but he allows justice to prevail on His grounds and conditions- live one another- war never did good and man lost in the ways of the flesh being more harm than good- we given our own wills need to choose right- great words love the dove and the spiritual connotation used here- God is amazing🌹

[Raj Sahu]

Thanks a lot dear! My hearty reverence to your honourable words.

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Such kind words- always a pleasure🌹

[Zephyr]

This is a very amusing Poem Raj!
The message you carry along with your descriptive style is quite good!
Thank you very much for sharing this.
I absolutely loved this!

[Raj Sahu]

Thanks a lot dear. 😊

[Zephyr]

Pleasure...:)

[barleygirl]

Since I've hated war all my life, I was drawn to read your poem. I find it to be very original, the way you tell it like a story, a parable that contains a lesson, & good use of metaphors that suggest war & peace, like the dove. In the first stanza, it seems weird to stay so general about the reason war had to be fought. It might be a little stronger if this was more specific. People don't just stroll into war like it's a good idea. I think you need to be more convincing about why this guy was determined to go out to make war. Then the realization of what he got himself into would be more powerful, I think. I like the way you slip from reality to fantasy, mixing hardcore scenes with gentle symbolic imagery. I always love a good story with a compelling lesson.

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you so much. 😊

[Anjali]

This is so good! The rhyming scheme and the emotions, everything is just so beautiful and amazing. This is so damn good! This is called talent, you just made me feel so much, with your words. Keep writing!

[Raj Sahu]

Thanks a lot dear. 😊

[Anjali]

No problem!😀😀

[Priyanshi]

After a long time, friend, i got to read another wonderful poem from you...rhyming is good....a strong message it carry....
i loved it.

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you very much dear poetess. 😊

[Priyanshi]

my pleasure.

[wordman]

we will always have war to boost the economy and control the population,welcome to the real world
we die for some screwed up politician

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you 😊

[Coyote Poetry]

Soldiers who saw war. They want peace and to forget war. It is sad our leader send the young to learn war and death before love. A powerful write with great meaning. Thank you my friend for sharing the outstanding poetry. One people and one earth. We must get along for the sake of the children.
Coyote

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you so much dear Coyote. 😊

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.

[Mr.Writer]

If our belief's are strong and firm, we don't need to worry and this beautiful poem explained it!
Well done, keep it up!

[Raj Sahu]

Thanks for your beautiful review. 😊

[Mr.Writer]

No problem :))

[Najam Us Saher]

What a marvellous write...!!!
I loved the strong message. Not everyone can write with such passion and concern.

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you very much. 😊

[Najam Us Saher]

You're welcome. :)

[Bear]

Critique: (To recruit in army for a particular cause.) an army - The word "in" doesn’t fit this context
(A sudden silence spread over noise) Having silence over noise is a contradiction and a context issue, might I suggest "A sudden silence spread suppressing the noise" ?
(At horizon a beautiful bird crossed) At the horizon, - identifying word needed


Review: The true power of faith is not the moving of mountains but the swaying of heart and dark intent they may hold. Well done my friend an inspirational and moving poem Bravo! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

[Raj Sahu]

Thanks a lot dear Bear. 😊