O mine beloved mother!

An eulogy for my teacher who is my mother!

O mine beloved mother! thee canst not ever wend far,

Far to the remotest lodging from my heart,

But if 't be true thee doth, my heart's door is ajar,

Peeping thy sweet memories, gratitude for thy part.

Thou hast loved, cared and adored me,

In the picture of the children, thou hast begotten.

So tender is thy love, so deep I see

In the mouth of doom, which canst not be forgotten.

I joyously sing the praise of thy generous conduct

No such mortal on this earth hast I ever hath met

Angels tooketh era to buildeth such a kind product

Sending thee amongst mortals made their eyes wet.

Thou art the guiding god-mother I believeth,

Day by day, thou brightens my darkened path.

Day by day, my all the sorrows taketh

Thy mellow-mouthed words for a replenish bath.

Eternal beauty liveth in thy eyes,

Ne'er ending affection flows from them.

And thou art my loveliest prize

And I am thy most precious gem.

******

I pray I pray to the ultimate master of all,

To place his divine hand on that lady soul.

I beseech the creator of great and small,

To strengthen that lady to fulfil her role.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I admire you for tackling a long poem using intricate form for rhyme & dialect. Your poem is well-crafted with an "old time" sound . . . something popular to imitate . . . and difficult to get right. I must say that your Shakespearean sound is not always easy to follow & glide across while reading (a little clunky). But we don't get good at new styles if we don't try & this is a great effort for you. I have a bias against elevated language that you use here (your message is strong & well-developed, it's just the sound I don't like much) . . . this stilted language doesn't convey the warmth & affection like writing in a more conversational way (just my opinion!) (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you so much!

[Caitlyn Lacovara]

Loving the rhyme scheme of the poetry, as well as the sophisticated writing style depicted by the language/word choice. What a beautiful and thoughtful poem, well done!

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you so much!

[LylaCrystal]

I remembered a story I heard from my mother: once, a child was talking with God in Heaven. One day, He decided to send him to earth, so that he could be born. The child was scared, but God reassured him he would be alright, saying: ”I will give you an angel who would protect and love you.” ”What will be the name of the angel?”, the child asked. ”You will call the angel MOTHER.”
Great job summarizing the preciousness of a mother!

[Raj Sahu]

A beautiful anecdote!
Thank you!

[LylaCrystal]

Your welcome!

[Mohamed Rahim Iqbal]

What an amazing poem you had written... Piece of work.
I'm honestly saying this was great
Keep working on these types of work

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you very much!

[Blakprinze (Vincent J.)]

Such a rich and beautiful dedication. Such a fantastic poem. Thank You!

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you!

[Leslie Philibert]

Fine job that echoes, for me, 19th poets, written in a standard verse form. Good work, rhymed poetry is,
for me difficult, so I admire those who have a go.

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you so much!

[Bec]

Feeling the emotion from this

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you!

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

My heart always swells with happiness to know that someone has had such love in his life. I wasn't so fortunate, but I have always wished it for others. I agree with Barleygirl about the clunkiness of the language, but the message is as beautiful as a tear in a joyous eye. It's touching to see a son who loves his mother so much. You are blessed beyond words.

[Raj Sahu]

Thanks a lot!

[Wild Rose]

A lovely poem > NO Prayer for all mum's

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you!

[alanwgraham]

This is quite an impressive poem Raj. Our relationship with our mother is indeed unique and irreplaceable and you have expressed it eloquently. My only comment is why have you have chosen to express it in this antique English. I fear you may leave some behind. It would be interesting to convert it into contemporary language.
Regards.
Alan

[Raj Sahu]

Actually, I am much influenced by archaic language and classics, so tried to compose one in that style! Thank you for your kind words.

[John the Baptist]

The sense of gratitude and admiration for mothers comes through strongly in this one. The employment of Elizabethan English, though, needs a little polishing.

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you!