O mine beloved mother!

O mine beloved mother!

A Poem by Raj Sahu
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An eulogy for my teacher who is my mother!

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O mine beloved mother! thee canst not ever wend far,
Far to the remotest lodging from my heart,
But if 't be true thee doth, my heart's door is ajar,
Peeping thy sweet memories, gratitude for thy part.

Thou hast loved, cared and adored me,
In the picture of the children, thou hast begotten.
So tender is thy love, so deep I see
In the mouth of doom, which canst not be forgotten.



I joyously sing the praise of thy generous conduct
No such mortal on this earth hast I ever hath met
Angels tooketh era to buildeth such a kind product
Sending thee amongst mortals made their eyes wet.

Thou art the guiding god-mother I believeth,
Day by day, thou brightens my darkened path.
Day by day, my all the sorrows taketh
Thy mellow-mouthed words for a replenish bath.



Eternal beauty liveth in thy eyes,
Ne'er ending affection flows from them.
And thou art my loveliest prize
And I am thy most precious gem.

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I pray I pray to the ultimate master of all,
To place his divine hand on that lady soul.
I beseech the creator of great and small,
To strengthen that lady to fulfil her role.

© 2019 Raj Sahu


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I admire you for tackling a long poem using intricate form for rhyme & dialect. Your poem is well-crafted with an "old time" sound . . . something popular to imitate . . . and difficult to get right. I must say that your Shakespearean sound is not always easy to follow & glide across while reading (a little clunky). But we don't get good at new styles if we don't try & this is a great effort for you. I have a bias against elevated language that you use here (your message is strong & well-developed, it's just the sound I don't like much) . . . this stilted language doesn't convey the warmth & affection like writing in a more conversational way (just my opinion!) (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

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Raj Sahu

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much!



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Such a rich and beautiful dedication. Such a fantastic poem. Thank You!

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Raj Sahu

1 Year Ago

Thank you!
Fine job that echoes, for me, 19th poets, written in a standard verse form. Good work, rhymed poetry is,
for me difficult, so I admire those who have a go.

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Raj Sahu

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much!
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Feeling the emotion from this

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Raj Sahu

1 Year Ago

Thank you!
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My heart always swells with happiness to know that someone has had such love in his life. I wasn't so fortunate, but I have always wished it for others. I agree with Barleygirl about the clunkiness of the language, but the message is as beautiful as a tear in a joyous eye. It's touching to see a son who loves his mother so much. You are blessed beyond words.

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Raj Sahu

1 Year Ago

Thanks a lot!
A lovely poem > NO Prayer for all mum's


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Raj Sahu

1 Year Ago

Thank you!
This is quite an impressive poem Raj. Our relationship with our mother is indeed unique and irreplaceable and you have expressed it eloquently. My only comment is why have you have chosen to express it in this antique English. I fear you may leave some behind. It would be interesting to convert it into contemporary language.
Regards.
Alan



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Raj Sahu

1 Year Ago

Actually, I am much influenced by archaic language and classics, so tried to compose one in that sty.. read more
The sense of gratitude and admiration for mothers comes through strongly in this one. The employment of Elizabethan English, though, needs a little polishing.

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Raj Sahu

1 Year Ago

Thank you!
What a beautiful poem you've written.
It tells how amazing mothers are and that they deserve everything good.
Your thoughts and idea with the composition this piece are powerful.


Good one, Raj.

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Raj Sahu

1 Year Ago

Thank you very much!
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DAH
A lovely tribute to a lovely being.

Bravo,
DAH

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Raj Sahu

1 Year Ago

Thank you!
DAH

1 Year Ago

My pleasure!
Written in old English, this tribute to your teacher and mother moves with graceful, cadence through its lines. It is clear to the reader just how cherished this lady is. I enjoyed both your poem and the posted images. Motherhood, a wonderful thing.

Chris

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Raj Sahu

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much!

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Raj Sahu
Raj Sahu

Burhanpur, Madhya Pradesh, India



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