A Note from Oblivion

A Note from Oblivion

A Poem by C.L. Wilson
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one of my older poems I found lying around. It was my best reviewed before everthing got erased.

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My steps echo into the void
of a massive building
long since destroyed
 
I feel a presence in the sky
a creature of the dark
whispering “Time to Die”
 
The trials I face ahead
all alone
Lead most to the horrid dead
 
No, not me I persevere
where most fail
I will live or so I fear
 
Like an old lonely rose
in a forgotten bed
I have fallen into eternal doze
 
Don’t follow my tracks
young hearted reader
Never hold back.

© 2008 C.L. Wilson


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I like it, I could guess as to what were the trials that you had to face when you wrote this, but the way you describe it here, awsome, an old massive building, meaning you seemed to have many problems one after another and yet you faced them even though your were pretty sure the end wasnt going to be a pretty one, the las part being suggested by the "creature of the dark" and "whispering "Time to die"....either that or I'm reading way too much into it, which I have a habit of doing sometimes O.o

Posted 11 Years Ago


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this is a great poem..... exactly what i was looking for in my contest...... good luck in my contest and good job with this poem.....keep up the great work!!!! :-)

Posted 9 Years Ago


I like it, I could guess as to what were the trials that you had to face when you wrote this, but the way you describe it here, awsome, an old massive building, meaning you seemed to have many problems one after another and yet you faced them even though your were pretty sure the end wasnt going to be a pretty one, the las part being suggested by the "creature of the dark" and "whispering "Time to die"....either that or I'm reading way too much into it, which I have a habit of doing sometimes O.o

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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This is a good poem. It was very interesting to read.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The figurative language is brilliant.

Posted 11 Years Ago


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"Don't follow my tracks
young hearted reader
Never hold back."
Sums it up and nicely put, not action that leads to oblivion sometimes it's inaction.
A lot of this is familiar (uncomfortably so ), but I suppose we are both still writing, so not quite .. off to the eternal doze

~raven (yep this name is pretty new too !-well at least to me it is )

Posted 11 Years Ago


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This is a great poem..

It wreaks of regret and failure,
or maybe that's my own interpretation.
"don't hold back"... don't let fear prevent
you from ... living.

I love the last stanza... the message it
sends forth.

Nice work! :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


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I enjoyed the poem. I think following you would be okay.
Thank you for the review.

Lesa

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this is gorgeous i really like it especially the first two stanzas

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this is darkly beautiful and enchanting. flows smoothly. i loved it. well done.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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