Cherry Blossom

Cherry Blossom

A Poem by Ravenskald
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Haiku passing through four seasons

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Snow laden branches
cold thin bitten limbs outstretched
Bracing against frost

First warmth and sap flows
Second breath the shoots caress
The open white flowers

Height of the sun king
Packet bee loads and unloads
The pollen letters

Fall in the leaf time
Red orb fruit swelling in pride
Casting new life round

© 2009 Ravenskald


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I really like this chain. It shows a lot of depth, and really explores the season. It is one of the better ones I have seen here. I did notice a slight error in number three however. Line three has six syllables instead of five which technically puts it over. The rest of the components are very solid, and that line is still solid, but I think it needs a slight change. If you can fix that line by tomorrow I would say that you have a really good chance of placing high in my Haiku contest. Very nicely done.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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"pollen letters"--striking combo. thanks!

Posted 7 Years Ago


wonderful!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Congratulations for winning Haiku-2 Contest!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I really like this chain. It shows a lot of depth, and really explores the season. It is one of the better ones I have seen here. I did notice a slight error in number three however. Line three has six syllables instead of five which technically puts it over. The rest of the components are very solid, and that line is still solid, but I think it needs a slight change. If you can fix that line by tomorrow I would say that you have a really good chance of placing high in my Haiku contest. Very nicely done.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

really beautiful, enjoyable read. greta imagery. reminds me of the blossom trees in my garden when i was little. beautiful poem :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is one beautiful Haiku!
I love cherry trees in bloom.
How lovely how you carry from one
season to another. Kudos!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

So wonderful and beuatiful.
Enjoyable read.


Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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