Untitled sad poem

I came up with the first few couplets a while ago, & the rest popped into my head at 1030 as I was trying 2 go 2 bed last night, so I got up and typed it :)The last couplet was actually why i wrote it

I’m crying silent tears inside,

They couldn’t save him, the doctors tried.

 

One dark, rainy night in late November,

Where he was driving, he couldn’t remember.

 

Only going out for some drinks at the bar,

He should have never gotten back into the car.

 

He should have never gotten behind the wheel,

Now he’s gone; I don’t know how I should feel.

 

Inside I’m hollow, twisted with pain,

Without him life won’t be the same.

 

In a week we’d be married, on the twenty eighth,

And now that’s the day they’re holding his wake.

 

His family sits grieving, and so do I,

But I think I have no more tears left to cry.

 

He was taken so young, with life left to live,

And he had thoughts and ideas, things to give.

 

And as I lay alone in our bed,

I can’t help but think what would have been.

 

Ten years ago, on this very date,

An accident happened that sealed his fate.

 

People say I should try to move on,

But I just won’t accept the fact that he’s gone.

 

As a child you’re told ‘life isn’t fair,’

But really, neither is death.

 

 

Author's Note

its untitled for now.. i cant think of anything.. please suggest and review! :)

Reviews

[Alex Thomas]

This is really sad, but very powerful. For someone who has not been in such a situation, this is really emotional poetry. You can really sympathize with the narrator. Great job!

[Arien Bleuefire]

awww... this is so sad but sends a powerful message for no drunk driving! i love the rhyme scheme! beautifully written!