Little Pillar Box

Little Pillar Box

A Poem by Amberway
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A long distance relationship through letters

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A house at the end of the road

With my name on a pillar box in the front.

The letters, all the letters from you,

Taken from me to you in the litter pillar box.

Fresh ink spilled on my vanity and a quill by the parchment,

Stamped and sealed with a kiss,

with the scent of perfume and oils from my hands.

 A last farewell of our far fantasy.

All our memories and life together traveling,

Through the little pillar box

Out front a house at the end of the road that will never keep us.

© 2012 Amberway


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Amberway
I just wrote this. Please let me know what you think :)

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I like the way that the words flowed in this one and I like the story behind it as well. I like the final lines set up, the whole poem has the feel of a classic love letter and I think it works well for this.
Only suggestion would be some grammar, like a period here and there, a couple of coma's for clarity. I've taken the liberty to add them in as best I could, I hope you don't mind, and hopefully it works for you:

"A house at the end of the road
With my name on a pillar box in the front.
The letters, all the letters from you,
Taken from me to you in the litter pillar box.
Fresh ink spilled on my vanity and a quill-by the parchment
Stamped and sealed with a kiss.
With the scent of perfume and oils from my hands,
A last farewell of our far fantasy,
All our memories and life together, traveling
Through the little pillar box,
Out front a house at the end of the road that will never keep us."

thanks for the read.

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.



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I think it was an interesting selection for a conceptual theme, I quite like the last line, a flourish of a finish.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amberway

11 Years Ago

Thank you!
its ok

Posted 12 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amberway

12 Years Ago

what made it just ok?
very good it gives the reader a deep sence of lonliness.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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unknowning

12 Years Ago

your welcome and please feel free to read and comment on some of my work
Amberway

12 Years Ago

I will!
Nice piece, the last line does a good job leaving the reader with the sorrow. Nice flow and very vivid imagery. Good work.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Strong ending.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This took me back in time, and I loved the feel. Especially the "Stamped with a kiss, with the scent of perfume and oils from my hand" I love little details like that.

:)

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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A very well written and interesting poem.

Posted 12 Years Ago


I like the way that the words flowed in this one and I like the story behind it as well. I like the final lines set up, the whole poem has the feel of a classic love letter and I think it works well for this.
Only suggestion would be some grammar, like a period here and there, a couple of coma's for clarity. I've taken the liberty to add them in as best I could, I hope you don't mind, and hopefully it works for you:

"A house at the end of the road
With my name on a pillar box in the front.
The letters, all the letters from you,
Taken from me to you in the litter pillar box.
Fresh ink spilled on my vanity and a quill-by the parchment
Stamped and sealed with a kiss.
With the scent of perfume and oils from my hands,
A last farewell of our far fantasy,
All our memories and life together, traveling
Through the little pillar box,
Out front a house at the end of the road that will never keep us."

thanks for the read.

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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