Little Pillar Box

A long distance relationship through letters

A house at the end of the road

With my name on a pillar box in the front.

The letters, all the letters from you,

Taken from me to you in the litter pillar box.

Fresh ink spilled on my vanity and a quill by the parchment,

Stamped and sealed with a kiss,

with the scent of perfume and oils from my hands.

 A last farewell of our far fantasy.

All our memories and life together traveling,

Through the little pillar box

Out front a house at the end of the road that will never keep us.

Author's Note

I just wrote this. Please let me know what you think :)

Reviews

[Hiddenfire]

I like the way that the words flowed in this one and I like the story behind it as well. I like the final lines set up, the whole poem has the feel of a classic love letter and I think it works well for this.
Only suggestion would be some grammar, like a period here and there, a couple of coma's for clarity. I've taken the liberty to add them in as best I could, I hope you don't mind, and hopefully it works for you:

"A house at the end of the road
With my name on a pillar box in the front.
The letters, all the letters from you,
Taken from me to you in the litter pillar box.
Fresh ink spilled on my vanity and a quill-by the parchment
Stamped and sealed with a kiss.
With the scent of perfume and oils from my hands,
A last farewell of our far fantasy,
All our memories and life together, traveling
Through the little pillar box,
Out front a house at the end of the road that will never keep us."

thanks for the read.

[Sola]

I think it was an interesting selection for a conceptual theme, I quite like the last line, a flourish of a finish.

[Amberway]

Thank you!

[Adam Whitworth]

its ok

[Amberway]

what made it just ok?

[unknowning]

very good it gives the reader a deep sence of lonliness.

[Amberway]

thank you!

[unknowning]

your welcome and please feel free to read and comment on some of my work

[Amberway]

I will!

[Freedom's Child]

Nice piece, the last line does a good job leaving the reader with the sorrow. Nice flow and very vivid imagery. Good work.

[R.Ivan]

Strong ending.

[Aella.lives]

This took me back in time, and I loved the feel. Especially the "Stamped with a kiss, with the scent of perfume and oils from my hand" I love little details like that.

:)

[ATG]

A very well written and interesting poem.