Fire & Rain

Fire & Rain

A Poem by redzone
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....a sort of eulogy for illusion...

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Fire & Rain

Several mornings ago
I woke up to a rainy tomorrow,
today though was a raging fire.
It singed all my thoughts of you,
burnt the marrow you placed in my bones
leaving me painfully hollow.
Rain and fire,
rainy fire
and acidic spit;
how foolish to think
I would see you again...
~~~
Woke up tomorrow,
wrote down this poem
with the pieces of me lying around
cause I never could find a friend.
Sweet dreams have disappeared
in a long and lonely day
where the sun shines
on a Winter’s wind
and icicles form on my shriveled skin.

“Yet I always thought
I would see you again”
~~~
Fire, spit,
and lonely
rainy days,
though this is the end
of those foolish thoughts
of seeing you again.

Aztec Warrior/redzone 7.19.16
(Note: the quoted line is from James Taylor’s
song, “Fire & Rain”; as is the inspiration
for this poem)

© 2016 redzone


Author's Note

redzone
...thanks for reading...


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Some amazing lines in these lines of verse, Curt. Hard for me to pick a favourite part. Great work:)

Posted 4 Years Ago


redzone

4 Years Ago

you can like the whole poem Pryde, I will gracously accept... lol really, thanks Pryde I am just hap.. read more
This might be my favorite song of all time. Even tho I love the message, I've never actually experienced this kind of friend, nor have I BEEN this kind of friend. I like that your poem is the "anti-Fire&Rain-friend" message . . . how most of us feel when we hear a message about true-blue friendship. There are some really creative aspects to your message, starting with the idea of straddling the line between the present & tomorrow. I love the "bone marrow" line toward the beginning. Love: "wrote this poem with the pieces of me lying around" (very nicely worded & relatable!) This message fits right in with my slightly-bad attitude of late, where I have a hard time believing in this line: "I always thought I'd see you again."

Posted 4 Years Ago


redzone

4 Years Ago

Margie, thank you, and for your info you are a great friend and your visits are always welcomed by m.. read more
burnt the marrow you placed in my bones
leaving me painfully hollow.

Incredible line that one...
So much sadness, and hurt. :(

The poem is beautifully written of course.

Posted 4 Years Ago


redzone

4 Years Ago

yeah, ;0( is right.. I am glad you came by and read, you are always welcome here Ana
Sad that it hurts. Hoprful that it bursts. Mindful that it is guaranty first. You embrace even the illusion for her sake and let destiny draw the conclusion in feeling the ache. Very touching...:)..................

Posted 4 Years Ago


redzone

4 Years Ago

thanks Sami... happy you stopped by and felt the poem...
Sami Khalil

4 Years Ago

You are welcome. .....:))))
That song....ohhhh that song! What memories every line holds! "The plans they made put an end to you," but perhaps the line that hits home with the reason for this poem is, "Wrote down a song. Just can't remember who to send it to." The heartbreak is palpable in this one, Curt. When the one you care so much for walks away, it feels like your life has been through the shredder. It feels like the pieces will never be put together again. You have so much love to give and the one you want to give it to refuses it. Truth is, we are not Humpty Dumpty and even though it hurts, after falling off that wall, we can and do move onward and upward....even though we know we will never seen her/him again. To say this poem is "nice" does not cover it, nope, not at all. Super duper! Lydi**

Posted 4 Years Ago


redzone

4 Years Ago

ahh Lydi, this song sprang into my mind and has become a certain theme twice now in my life, though .. read more
love that song---and how it inspired this excellent piece of writing---i especially like the pieces of me lying around on the ground...idea.

"just yesterday morning, they let me know you were gone"

j.

Posted 4 Years Ago


redzone

4 Years Ago

thanks Jacob... glad you stopped by today.. wonderful comment appreciated...
As to the poem itself -- amazing, vivid imagery, sharp, painful words -- literally gut wrenching. One of your best works, filled with raw emotion and sorrow with a capital S -- I feel for the speaker here, very much. It is well formatted, presented with honesty, and beautifully clear in its meaning. The event and person who are the subject of this poem would do well to read it and feel it. Hugs. I hope the writing of it helped, somewhat.

Posted 4 Years Ago


redzone

4 Years Ago

yeah, it's helped.. thanks Kl for the really nice review...

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