Unfinished Poems 1

...two thoughts...

Snippets: Unfinished Poems 1

Midnight
and the light was fandangled
in many shades.
Maybe it was just moon beams
fluttering from the sky,
but you always knew
how to make a grand entrance,
arousing heart beats,
serenading ink to dance across my page.
~~~
Or maybe, it was the way Mars
is sometimes the brightest orb in the sky
and reflects an impossible
“wish I may,
wish I might
have my wish tonight”,
a midnight kiss
to carry my heart,
but which can never come true….

Aztec Warrior/redzone  9.28.2016

Author's Note

....thanks for reading..

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

The one who can charm the ink and make it dance is the one who deserves that midnight kiss....even if it is only in fantasy. You say this is an unfinished poem yet I feel it is very complete. Even wishes that don't come true can make life rosier. Bittersweet loveliness. Lydi**

[Coyote Poetry]

So many strong statements in this poem could be the title. The words "serenading ink ". Tempting title I believe. I liked the tenderness and the pace of the words.
“wish I may,
wish I might
have my wish tonight”,
The above lines. Wonderful. I could write a epic poem from. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[1VJ]

Unfinished? Hardly, you've only just begun this celestial journey. Stars may fizzle but your lovely words are delectably searing.

"serenading ink to dance across my page" I wish I had thought of that. Exquisite poetry!

[redzone]

good afternoon Paloma, yes, stars do fizzle, planets crumble to dust, but it is only stars that grant dreams come true.. that allow for the possible... I seem to remember a song that spoke of "Impossible Dreams" foolish to waste them on Mars... oh well...

thanks for your wonderful visit and "exquisite" comment... ;0)

[1VJ]

There's poetry in that response, 'impossible dreams' are usually for dreamers, poets, artistes and crooners. :)

[redzone]

can I plead guilty??? ;0)

[1VJ]

Sure but you'll probably get thrown in the brig. :)

[Kelly Scheppers]

...be still my heart...this is the ultimate of romantic musings!

[redzone]

you are too kind Kelly... thanks for your words and sentiments... glad your heart beats, mine is somewhere lost on mars... lol...

[Ana Papaya]

beautiful and romantic but then I got the part where I realized it is an unrealized wish and that is sad.
:(

[redzone]

Ana, it's a star that gets wished on... Mars just laughs at you... see, I do have silly boy dreams, just have to get the right orbs to grant my silliness.. eh!

[wordman]

this is a touching write,enjoyed the read

[redzone]

thanks Ron, gad you enjoyed and visited...

[redzone]

that's GLAD

[wordman]

i have read a few of your writes,i liked them all

[redzone]

and I must do better at reading you as well Ron...

[wordman]

well ,i appreciate all reviews,but i`m not a attention w***e,lol