Undone

...once I loved... it came undone

Undone

 

“who do you need

who do you love

     when you come undone?”

          -- Duran Duran

 

there’s a Yellow Moon tonight

it shines somewhere

but not here

     here it is black.

somewhere stars shine,

they sing their songs,

make moon beams dance

but not here

     here there is only silence,

     cold and bleak.

somewhere there is love

and light,

where two hold hands,

laugh, tumble into arms

a passionate caress

somewhere tonight under a Yellow Moon.

but not anywhere near here

     here is only lonely,

     where you once played

     the music of my heart.

~~~

somewhere tonight a Yellow Moon shines

its violin for the stars

I swear it’s the music of you.

here, there is nothing,

your voice has gone silent,

you have gone away;

      here all has come undone.

 

Aztec Warrior/redzone 4.11.17

Author's Note

....thanks for reading...

Reviews

[barleygirl]

As soon as I got to the "Yellow Moon" part, I remembered another poem of yours about the color "yellow" (loved that poem!) You're telling this with much melancholy . . . longing . . . sadness . . . I love the way you contrast how such-and-such is happening (happy stuff) but not here. I think many people think in these terms, like everyone else is having a great time & here I am all lonely. Actually I believe most people are miserable, so we only like to BELIEVE that someone, somewhere else is having it great! Anyhow, I love your poetry -- always so expressive & heartfelt. But I've been missing you on this website. I was happy to find a recent poem of yours I haven't read yet! *smile* (((HUGS)))

[redzone]

aaaahhh it's Margie and with her great reviews as she moves through one of my poems... I must have forgotten to take my happy pill when I wrote this, eh... lol...

actually the poem more or less came from this song "undone" than anything very personal, though I guess like everyone, I could write real melancholy and not just fantasy...

I have been busy as late and not able to get to WC as often as I would like... so I am missing you too Margie... hope you re doing well, enjoying the heat of summer... thanks for the visit my wonderful friend...

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Curt... "where you once played the music of my heart"... "violin for the stars"... your words have
played softly on my heart. truly, Pat

[redzone]

thank you kindly Patricia, so glad you liked...

[Cryingkate]

I purposely came to find you and so glad I first picked this one to read.
I brought a flash light
Some. fried chicken and a picnic blanket
Come on, lets get out of here and go to the park.

[redzone]

hi Kate... thank you for the warm visit and the picnic basket full of goodies... if you are still up for getting out of here, yes, lets go... ;0)

[Kelly Scheppers]

Our world can't help but unravel, after we have come undone. I'm surprised the sun and the moon know where to shine - but the violin seems apropos!

[redzone]

I think the moon and stars always like to shine over your way Kelly... ;0) thanks for the lovey comment..

[MsJewel]

This is one of those poems that curls right up in my heart. I hope the moon and stars shine for you soon my friend. Julie

[redzone]

thanks Julie... so nice to see you wondering around... and I hope the moon and stars are shining for you as well...

[wordman]

the last stanza says it all,this is a great write

[redzone]

thanks Ron

[Lydia Shutter]

Singing....she's come undoneeeeee....she didn't know what she was headed for.....Yea, that seems to be the song of the week. The moon, the stars, and the sun are for lovers and for people who are content. Those who are not see only the darkness. The stars do not twinkle for them. The music will play again...perhaps not the same tune, but actually that is a good thing. Your words are always deeply emotional, Curt. So very "nice". Lydi**

[redzone]

no, never the same tune Lydi... Thank you.. I love your "nice reviews....

[Ana Papaya]

Such a great come back song for these guys and has inspired a great poem too. Time passes, voices go silent but the sun and moon both take turns sharing the day and the stars will live on forever. Even after we're gone.

[redzone]

true this, we are more finite than sun, moon and stars, though they to will go at some point... but in the finite time that I have, I wouldn't mind having a small infinity with a love(r)... the taste of light, the feel of skin... I was listening to Pandora on the computer and this song by Duran Duran came on and I remembered it and began to write... thank you Ana...