Day Two

Day Two

A Poem by redzone
"

….sea cruisin'.....

"

Day Two

 

 

It was a dark and stormy night!

Always wanted to start a poem

with that trite line.

Funny how sometimes

you do get what you wish for,

though usually

not the important things.

 

But it was a surreal day.

Motion everywhere,

As we cut through choppy waters,

the Atlantic wanting to let us know,

she was there,

and we,

silly humans that we are,

are at her command.

 

Awakened first light

by this motion;

to the sky kissing the waters

with foggy lips,

and in a Dali-esque way

painting a sensual sway

of waves reaching,

undulating,

rising and falling

to gather in the clouds,

the sweet release of rain.

All day

And into the night,

We were treated to

The panorama of a

Sky/ocean orgy of wetness.

 

Aztec Warrior/redzone 4.30.19


© 2019 redzone


Author's Note

redzone
....thanks for reading....


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Modern times Pablo Neruda alive and well. A gorgeous writing with outstanding lines to quote. Very descriptive and in the moment ...

Posted 4 Years Ago


redzone

4 Years Ago

Sami, what a grand compliment, Neruda was one of my favorite poets.... thank you so much for this..... read more
Sami Khalil

4 Years Ago

Wow! You are welcome Redzone.
"orgy of wetness"....brilliant way to describe a rainy day at sea, Curt. I can relate...you know that. There is nothing quite like seeing the rain pound the deck of a cruise ship. It makes a person feel small...powerless. Mother Nature is in control always. Such a "nice" write, my friend. Lydi***

Posted 4 Years Ago


redzone

4 Years Ago

yes, "powerless" and small in the scheme of things... I loved that sea adventure Lydi and love your .. read more
well, Snoopy....you did much with your first line there.
this is so good...especially the allusions to the painting...the sensual waves....almost like making love to the sea....
like Looking Glass sang....
"my life, my love and my lady is the sea"

Posted 4 Years Ago


redzone

4 Years Ago

I think that song was titled 'Brandy', nice song gong to go have a listen....

thanks.. read more
jacob erin-cilberto

4 Years Ago

yep, Brandy was the name of the song...great song...
redzone

4 Years Ago

yes, definitely was a great song...
Lovely descriptive poem that uses scene to pull the reader in and offer them a glimpse of the journey. LOVED the lines ' the sky kissing the waters/with foggy lips'

Posted 4 Years Ago


redzone

4 Years Ago

Thanks John, nice of you to say... thanks for the visit and comment

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