Ink Bleeding

Ink Bleeding

A Poem by Rhea752

Ink 
Bleeding 
Scratching 
Carving 
A world 
In the stars 
In the sky 
Of your mind 
A Heaven 
And a Hell 
To the writer 
And the reader 
Ink  
Bleeding 
Scratching 
Carving 
Your escape 
Of the heart 
And the soul

© 2012 Rhea752


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The third and fourth lines / words did a good job of summarizing the style of this poem. I picture each word as a triumphant attack being scratched against formlessness on a white void, a chiseled and decisive victory.

For some reason I wish "In the sky / Of your mind" was one line despite seeing "A world ... Of your mind" as probably an intended construct. Maybe just for variety's sake. That's not a criticism, just a comment.

The final sense of the poem, for me, was that writing is a desperate race to complete ourselves before we die; that our creativity is a permanent hemorrhage which will spill out of us, either intentionally, or fatally. And I heard the sound of a pen scratching paper with almost every line.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rhea752

7 Years Ago

Thank you very much Nathan, I appreciate this review



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Very nice. I enjoyed it :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


The third and fourth lines / words did a good job of summarizing the style of this poem. I picture each word as a triumphant attack being scratched against formlessness on a white void, a chiseled and decisive victory.

For some reason I wish "In the sky / Of your mind" was one line despite seeing "A world ... Of your mind" as probably an intended construct. Maybe just for variety's sake. That's not a criticism, just a comment.

The final sense of the poem, for me, was that writing is a desperate race to complete ourselves before we die; that our creativity is a permanent hemorrhage which will spill out of us, either intentionally, or fatally. And I heard the sound of a pen scratching paper with almost every line.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rhea752

7 Years Ago

Thank you very much Nathan, I appreciate this review
awesome!! this was amazing. Love it. Absolutely love it.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Short, simple and elegant. I love it!
100/100

Posted 7 Years Ago


I love your use of one word lines, it's very creative! :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


I love how you say that writing is a good bandage for a wound without speaking of the topic directly. You intrigued me and I may as well do something regarding ink soon . . .

Posted 7 Years Ago


O.o So much to say with so little words. The action words are the best "Bleeding Scratching, Carving. Great job!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Short and simple in it's perfection. Love it. Great piece. (:

Posted 7 Years Ago


Wow! That was well done! I love the power in the words, it's gorgeous! Awesome job!

Posted 7 Years Ago


I agree with Elege!!! Great work as always, Rhea!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Rhea752

7 Years Ago

thank you!!!

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Rhea752
Rhea752

Middle Of My Daydreams, FL



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I am a 15 year old girl who loves to read, write, act, and draw. I just started writing seriously about 2 years ago. I've been published a few times in small online magazines. I am trying to find out .. more..

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