Ink Bleeding

Ink Bleeding

A Poem by Rhea752

Ink 
Bleeding 
Scratching 
Carving 
A world 
In the stars 
In the sky 
Of your mind 
A Heaven 
And a Hell 
To the writer 
And the reader 
Ink  
Bleeding 
Scratching 
Carving 
Your escape 
Of the heart 
And the soul

© 2012 Rhea752


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The third and fourth lines / words did a good job of summarizing the style of this poem. I picture each word as a triumphant attack being scratched against formlessness on a white void, a chiseled and decisive victory.

For some reason I wish "In the sky / Of your mind" was one line despite seeing "A world ... Of your mind" as probably an intended construct. Maybe just for variety's sake. That's not a criticism, just a comment.

The final sense of the poem, for me, was that writing is a desperate race to complete ourselves before we die; that our creativity is a permanent hemorrhage which will spill out of us, either intentionally, or fatally. And I heard the sound of a pen scratching paper with almost every line.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rhea752

10 Years Ago

Thank you very much Nathan, I appreciate this review



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Very nice. I enjoyed it :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


The third and fourth lines / words did a good job of summarizing the style of this poem. I picture each word as a triumphant attack being scratched against formlessness on a white void, a chiseled and decisive victory.

For some reason I wish "In the sky / Of your mind" was one line despite seeing "A world ... Of your mind" as probably an intended construct. Maybe just for variety's sake. That's not a criticism, just a comment.

The final sense of the poem, for me, was that writing is a desperate race to complete ourselves before we die; that our creativity is a permanent hemorrhage which will spill out of us, either intentionally, or fatally. And I heard the sound of a pen scratching paper with almost every line.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rhea752

10 Years Ago

Thank you very much Nathan, I appreciate this review
awesome!! this was amazing. Love it. Absolutely love it.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Short, simple and elegant. I love it!
100/100

Posted 10 Years Ago


I love your use of one word lines, it's very creative! :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


I love how you say that writing is a good bandage for a wound without speaking of the topic directly. You intrigued me and I may as well do something regarding ink soon . . .

Posted 10 Years Ago


O.o So much to say with so little words. The action words are the best "Bleeding Scratching, Carving. Great job!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Short and simple in it's perfection. Love it. Great piece. (:

Posted 10 Years Ago


Wow! That was well done! I love the power in the words, it's gorgeous! Awesome job!

Posted 10 Years Ago


I agree with Elege!!! Great work as always, Rhea!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Rhea752

10 Years Ago

thank you!!!

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Rhea752

Middle Of My Daydreams, FL



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