Flutter by, Butterfly

Flutter by, Butterfly

A Poem by Aehr
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First Haiku!!!

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Flutter by, oh little one
Your wings bring my soul to life
Bring color to my world

© 2012 Aehr


Author's Note

Aehr
My first haiku. I tried to follow the 5-7-5 rule, and I have no idea how this on is. Reviews please!!!

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awe this is so wonderful, Very nicely written.

Posted 11 Years Ago


this is good for a first haiku! these poems are a little harder to work....

Posted 11 Years Ago


Nothing as beautiful as a butterfly. Make us wish to fly and be free. Very good description in the excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 11 Years Ago


simply beautiful ....love it

Posted 11 Years Ago


Short but sweet

Posted 11 Years Ago


Lovely feel to the write.

Posted 11 Years Ago


This wonderful work may not be a haiku, technically, but it has the soul of one.

Haiku in English do not have to strictly follow the 5-7-5 (syllables, not words) but the syllable count do not exceed seventeen. But the important thing is you captured the essence of a haiku - conveying much in as little as possible - on your very first attempt. And for that, my dear, I give you a standing ovation! :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


First line 7 second line 7 .. last line 6 .. Still light and beautiful .. softly ..

Jazz

Posted 11 Years Ago


Beautiful

Posted 11 Years Ago


Well, it doesn't follow 5-7-5, it follows 6-7-6. You're counting syllables, my dear. Besides that technical error, it's very nice, has a sort of calming feeling to it. I like the picture too.

Posted 11 Years Ago



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