Coming Up Roses

Coming Up Roses

A Poem by rhythm&blues

I planted flowers last year-
nothing at all sprouted until now,
sun in your face shone brightly over me
everything's blooming a rosy hue

© 2013 rhythm&blues


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I think this one works on two levels. You have the surface level with the planting of the roses. Sometimes it takes season to reap what you planted. On a deeper level though, I think this one refers to a relationship. I can see your first line referring to the first few advances of a new relationship. Either scenario blooms into an age of growth and beauty. Thank you for sharing this one.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

rhythm&blues

7 Years Ago

Thank you for your lovely review Clockwork.



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Yes, there is the double meaning here but for me this is a pleasant early morning read that can hit home for some of the precious few::
I put mySELF out there awhile back...
Nobody saw...not until you
The future's looking brighter

Love the power in its simplicity,
thanks for sharing


Posted 6 Years Ago


Just as relationships need time and nurturing to mature so also roses need the right time and sun to help them bloom.YOu just have to give them enough time.......can't rush either.
Beautifully penned thoughts

Posted 7 Years Ago


i see a double meaning here too, planting seeds and waiting for them to grow to full bloom.. well thought out..:o)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Beautiful images to express the reward of patience - in time, the flowers bloom...

Well done!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

rhythm&blues

7 Years Ago

Thanks again Rita....a little bit of patience and lots of sun.
This was quite sublime. I love the imagery, and the metaphor of planting something and watching it grow, which can be applied to so many facets of life. You have written concisely here, but it is still quite striking. I would suggest only one, wee thing...perhaps some punctuation:

I planted flowers last year--
nothing at all sprouted until now,
sun in your face shone brightly over me,
everthing blooms a rosy hue. (too out the word "now" because it was used twice in the piece)

This is just my own take on it, but I appreciate it as it is as well. I just think a little punctuation would add to the drama and emotional impact, but still, this one is going into my favorites!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

rhythm&blues

7 Years Ago

I agree with you Sarah, I've seen many poets don't use punctuation, I'm in my beginning stages here,.. read more
rhythm&blues

7 Years Ago

Revised, let me know if you think it works, thanks again Sarah.
Girl Friday (Sarah W.)

7 Years Ago

Much better... The punctuation thing is a personal choice, and both ways have merit. To me, I use .. read more
Lovely words with pretty meanings, proper flowery stuff. Very honest and adult.

I do feel this piece could have another stanza, don't ask me why.

Regards

Samuel

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

rhythm&blues

7 Years Ago

I have a hard enough time getting out one stanza, I do appreciate your suggestion, thank you for rea.. read more
I am so happy to hear your roses are finally blooming! It has been a rough time, lately...I know. Angi~

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

rhythm&blues

7 Years Ago

Thanks Angi, think everything is coming up roses now.
What I say first is, "Ah, how nice"! The time was right for the right flower to be found!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

rhythm&blues

7 Years Ago

Thank you Sheila.
I think this one works on two levels. You have the surface level with the planting of the roses. Sometimes it takes season to reap what you planted. On a deeper level though, I think this one refers to a relationship. I can see your first line referring to the first few advances of a new relationship. Either scenario blooms into an age of growth and beauty. Thank you for sharing this one.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

rhythm&blues

7 Years Ago

Thank you for your lovely review Clockwork.
A stunning poem. Thank you for sharing...:)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

rhythm&blues

7 Years Ago

Thank you for reading, much obliged for your review. :)
Sami Khalil

7 Years Ago

You are welcome...:)

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