"I wait for you"

"I wait for you"

A Poem by richieb
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Yearning for lost love

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                        I waited for you at the bridge, our meeting place.
                       There we once kissed and embraced, grasping               
                       fingers, thoughts entwined, lovers
                      I watched the road, hilly with soft grassy bank's.
                      You never came.

                     I waited for you at the edge of the woods. We once
                    walked enchanted paths littered with violet and
                    golden wild flowers tickling our steps.
                     I imagined angel's standing in the trees
                    I questioned if you were on your way.
                     They only smiled, silent as a dying leaf twirling
                    to the ground.
   
                     I sat waiting for you in your flower garden.
                     We once knitted blossoms flirting and laughing.
                     I whispered promises to you, lovers secrets.
                     We kidnapped each others hearts no caravan
                     able to carry the ransom.
                     I watched,
                    You never entered the garden gate.

                    I followed the stone walk to your home.
                   The shutters worn, falling.
                    Windows, musty and broken.
                    Darkness dwells inside your wall's.
                    Life is abandoned.
                    In the shadows I long for you,
                    answer your door.
                    Greet me with joy and laughter.
                    My spirit is dying.

                    I sit on your steps, tortured.
                    The hearth of my soul once blazed with a
                    wistful fury.
                    Now only gray ash lies on it's cold garret.
                    Demons rejoice and delight at my demise.
                    Truth bears no serenity for me, it assails
                    my being with its warrant.
                    I am eternally imprisoned.
      
                
                

© 2019 richieb


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WOW! This is definitely one of your most powerful messages that I can remember reading! My best friend died about 4 years ago & I've often wished I could write a poem that truly expresses the way it is when I'm half in the real world & half in the imaginary world of unreal expectations, as if we could re-enact some former situation, whatever it may have been. You poem comes the closest I've seen to the way I have felt about sharing many of my thoughts with an angel on the other side! The lyrical analogies of natural delights really makes everything feel buoyant & full of anticipation. This is a great poem. I think you could delete all the apostrophes & that would be less distracting to read. Most "s" words do not need an apostrophe (only in cases where two words have been contracted into one -- or in the possessive, as in belonging to x). If this is all too confusing just don't use an apostrophe & you'll be correct over 90% of the time! *smile* (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

richieb

10 Months Ago

Thank you Margie, you always lift my spirits. I heard the line "I am waiting for you" from a so.. read more



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This is such a wonderful read, filled with emotions. I enjoyed this write

Posted 1 Month Ago


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richieb

1 Month Ago

Thank you silent k for your review. I am happy you enjoyed this poem.
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'I wait for you',
richieb
This was so detailed in allegory. I love to find comparisons between one thing and emotion. You are far more skilled than I for sure. Beautifully done words among many:
"The hearth of my soul once blazed wth a
wistful fury
Now oly gray ash lies on it's cold garret..."
The writing speaks of rooms within the cottage of the heart symbols. Love it very much.
BLessings,
Kathy


Posted 2 Months Ago


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richieb

2 Months Ago

Kathy,
So great to hear from you, I trust you doing well. Thank you fo.. read more
Wow !thAts a great read.Enjoyed reading this marvelously designed poetry


Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

richieb

6 Months Ago

Muskan,
Thank you for your kind words, I am pleased you enjoyed this poem. I lo.. read more
A good friend of mine took off one day and never said goodbye. I remember not hearing from him and finding out later he moved to another state. I know that feeling of being abandoned. It doesn't feel good. Far worse would it have been had it been a girlfriend. I get that from this. That 'It can't be' feeling that doesn't leave until reality sets in.

Nice writing, Ritchie.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

richieb

7 Months Ago

Thank you Relic. The pain of loss can be devastating.
Peace,.. read more
The contrasting imagery of happy memories and the present reality of loss are highly evocative.
Thank you for sharing your work here.

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

richieb

8 Months Ago

Thank you Tony. I appreciate your comments.
Peace,
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Very vivid. I like it a lot. Great work. Your poetry is very high standard indeed. I wish that I could write as good as you could. Keep up the good work.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

richieb

9 Months Ago

Thank you for the encouraging review, I am glad you liked the poem. With hard work yo.. read more
Hmmm....I think this one was a perfect read with the song which I was listening to....twas also a yearn for lost love.....
now I've to admit that you did the work of detailing really well here....from bric-a-brac like "dying leaf twirling" to the intense depth of sorrow....

Lost beloved ones leave bitter truth in our sack....like it or not, gotta accept it!
This one was a meaningful read from you dear Richie....Thanks for sharing... Be blessed :)

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

richieb

9 Months Ago

Thank you Tashin Z. for your thorough review. I appreciate your comments.
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Dark, dramatic, despairing words. A tale of unrequited love told with the true melancholy only a rejected lover can know. And haven’t we all been at a figurative and perhaps even literal death’s door with it. Classically beautiful and eloquent language, stark, mournful imageryand metaphor. Good use of alliteration. Romeo could have spoken this at Juliet’s demise. Excellent and moving write richieb. A Happy, healthy New Year wished to you!

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

richieb

9 Months Ago

Thank you Annette for a thorough review, I very much appreciate your comments.
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I am forever waiting. This helped. Thanks for sharing. I enjoyed the read.

Posted 9 Months Ago


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richieb

9 Months Ago

Roger,
Thank you for reading, I appreciate your comments.read more
Very beautiful poem. I am wating for my mother even though I don't know if she's alive or dead.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

richieb

9 Months Ago

Thank you JungLee, I pray you find your mother alive and well.
P.. read more

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