Bled Dry

Bled Dry

A Poem by dan
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a friend of mine fell hopelessly in love with a girl who cut out his heart

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She scratched his world, that shark-fin girl,

She spread the kindling

Lit the torch…his Rorschach test guessed

Butterfly

But frozen moths appeared in hers.

 

He spent his heart with soul attached

His blood congealed in frigid veins,

She took the reins and rode him weak,

The days were skipped to speak

Of years; to end with tears

On wind-chapped cheek.

 

His love revealed, she bled him dry

To die inside beneath his skin,

Begin to wither like garden weed

Each seed reminds of what she killed.

This friend was broken, nerves exposed…

His bloodshot eyes

Forever closed.

 

His faith in feelings, shattered love

Above the fray,

Each rain-soaked day

Drip-dried above.

 

dan © 2015


Music: "Mud In Your Eye," by Nils Lofgren

© 2015 dan


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I particularly enjoyed the line "Each seed reminds of what she killed." powerful imagery and metaphor of opposites... of which without we understand nothing. very cool.

Posted 8 Years Ago


dan

8 Years Ago

Todd, This was based on a true time in my life; this girl had really burned my best friend, just lef.. read more
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Ohhh.. some heartbreaks are more difficult than others, and the heart truly is blind.. good for your friend to have you to fall back to when darkness envelops him.

Posted 8 Years Ago


dan

8 Years Ago

ms, Yes I exacted revenge FOR him. Was it a violent retribution? Yes...emotionally violent. She got .. read more
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8 Years Ago

:) ah!! revenge.. a two edged sword I am afraid :)
You write of heartbreak achingly well.

Posted 8 Years Ago


dan

8 Years Ago

Hi Luna, Luna C? I gotta love that handle. Oddly enough I have had few broken hearts in my life. Thi.. read more
Brittany Zedalis

8 Years Ago

It's a crescent moon symbol, haha. I hope your friend knew what you were doing and didn't think you.. read more
dan

8 Years Ago

No, once I broached the subject with him and told him my plan (again, we never thought it would actu.. read more
This is beautiful. Wish I wouldve known the song was there had it muted from the last youtube video I watched haha. Keep writing. I love the morbidness in this poetry. Dark poems are my s**t.

Posted 8 Years Ago


dan

8 Years Ago

Adam, So you think my writing is s**t?...Oh wait...sorry, read that wrong. I just ran into a little .. read more
An all too often story of insincerity causing a victim in a pseudo relationship. You capture the flatness of affect and the futility of it all in these verses.

Posted 8 Years Ago


dan

8 Years Ago

Thank you, John. I appreciate your read/review and insights. I've bookmarked your page and will retu.. read more
I can't imagine anyone intentionally hurting another with such intention. Good for your friend, he had you!

Posted 8 Years Ago


dan

8 Years Ago

Thank you Kelly. I'm not usually a vengeful person, but she really hammered my bud. I hurt her the s.. read more
Oh wow, that's real good Dan!
The kind of woman that we love to hate!
A real she-devil. :)
Rorschach test... That's brilliant.

Posted 8 Years Ago


dan

8 Years Ago

Thank you, Ana. This was a true story, after she s**t all over my best friend I wound up dating her,.. read more
Matching Socks

8 Years Ago

Bad? Nah... Not you. :)
She's an angel in guise of a heartless demon who sucks the living life and light of his. She is a vamp who feeds on naive souls full of love and generosity, because she hungers those qualities she so evidently lacks. I feel so much empathy for the poor dear's soul. He deserves only the best (I feel it). The pain of heartache aside, I loved this great deal. You painted a gorgeous abstract (but not ambiguous) canvas of madness, passion, blood, dying, indigo butterflies and dead moths, somewhere in between there is love, or whatever is left of it. I see it all in hues of reds and blues.

Posted 8 Years Ago


dan

8 Years Ago

Nadia, I was not saying you implied that, it's only after I sent the message I realized that it coul.. read more
Nadia Gerassimenko

8 Years Ago

Dear friend, do not worry I never thought of you that way. I have much respect and fondness for you .. read more
dan

8 Years Ago

Thank you Nadia. Your empathy is comforting. take care...dan
He spent his heart with soul attached
His blood congealed in frigid veins,

You do dark so well Dan. The imagery is brilliant. Thankfully he is free of this woman and hopefully his heart has healed.

I love the last verse as well.
His faith in feelings, shattered love
Above the fray,
Each rain-soaked day
Drip-dried above

Brilliant!

:) Julie






Posted 8 Years Ago


dan

8 Years Ago

Julie, Thanks so much. This is actually a true story, a little artistic license applied, but actual .. read more
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Dan, you certainly are an interesting read :) but, if we all keep doing what we don't like in others...just saying. Sometimes love just has to be for free, doesn't it? Hey, but what the hell do I know about the s**t :) This, as usual, was deeply thought, methodically constructed and a VERY interesting read. I seriously respect your craft, dear poet

Posted 8 Years Ago


dan

8 Years Ago

lynn, True story? About 35 years ago my best bud at the time fell in love hard; she strung him along.. read more
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8 Years Ago

my reviews are free too, Dan :) If you make it by, I'll see you then

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