strong or torn?

strong or torn?

A Poem by dan
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at times love can put up such strong barriers, is it really love? can the barriers be torn down?

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a climb toward what may be love

can be stopped by

barriers,

walls of doubt.

without a bludgeon, cudgel or axe

these meager whacks

just sap our strength,

the lengthy wait resumed.

 

the weight of our resolve

can solve the riddles of the walls,

the calls of love, the distant tones

recall such bones of barriers

rocked, forever locked

in combat with our will,

instilled in us by time.

 

the might of love can weaken

all such barriers with steely

thought, to be brought down

in the morn,

each impediment crushed or

torn.

 

dan © 2015

 

Music: “Torn,” by Natalie Imbruglia

© 2015 dan


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I enjoyed this alot.
I found something quite interesting

"the weight of our resolve"

When reading this line i thought the wait of our resolve then i saw the word weight
Beautiful line there
Plays both ways

And that is pretty special i think



Posted 8 Years Ago


dan

8 Years Ago

Nisreenaa, thank you for the very complimentary review, I am honored. take care...dan
I liked this a lot. I've been there before, too and it's not fun. What makes it better for me is that I've always loved the song Torn and it fits so well with your poem. I was singing and bobbing my head along with the music while reading through the poem. It was a wonderful experience for me. The message in your work is so true to everyone. When do we go from being strong to being torn? Thanks for sharing this with me Dan, I loved reading it :) Great work!!!

Posted 8 Years Ago


dan

8 Years Ago

River, For me this was about someone being burned by love once; in his/her future, they erect barrie.. read more
RiverRei

8 Years Ago

Wow, I'm honored that you wrote a poem with me in mind! That means so much to me. :) I'll keep this .. read more
Dan, I cannot agree with you more. It is true, love can really destroy barriers and walls and solve riddles. Only love can do that. Only love has the power to make as well as break. Glad to see an optimistic poem from you side. (I shouldn't be really saying that cause all of mine sound depressed, but still :P)

Take care Dan. You are an amazing writer. Keep going :D

Posted 8 Years Ago


dan

8 Years Ago

Annie, Believe it or not I do write lighter things, such as love poems. I am about to repost one tha.. read more
Isabel25

8 Years Ago

Yes..do send me an RR :) I would love to read it.
"the weight of our resolve can solve the riddles of the walls" Excellent verse, excellent poem, thank you for sharing.

~peace, Todd


Posted 8 Years Ago


dan

8 Years Ago

Todd, Thank you for the kind words. Those folks who have been previously burned by love tend to erec.. read more
modtoddinc

8 Years Ago

Well said, I had a similar discussion with my wife to be last evening, and your poem and comments ec.. read more
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Pain and fear are steely walls built for self preservation but love is like the river that carves canyons out of rock and steel walls turn to rust. I like all the meat in your pot of soup :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


dan

8 Years Ago

lynn, Well then for this purpose I'm glad you're not a vegetarian. I like your insightful observatio.. read more
Steely Dan, steely writing.
I was minded of the adage 'Faint heart never won fair lady' as I traversed this poem - and yet I came to the conclusion (purely personal) sadly there must be a time when the effort is too much (for both) and that's when the adage falls down while the walls remain standing. Thats the 'torn' time then I guess.
This resonated deeply with me this afternoon Dan.
Im glad to have read this. Thank you.
:)

Posted 8 Years Ago


dan

8 Years Ago

Anto, I like the direction this write took you, your insightful observations are always so relevant .. read more
ANTO

8 Years Ago

Im really chuffed that you think of me in that way Dan. It means a lot to hear that. Im honoured.read more
I love it dan and it is so very true. Your wording is amazing: I especially like recall such bones of barriers rocked & locked - it's all great writing. The last stanza really pulls it all together. Love is such a mystery: great metaphors and descriptions. Thank you so very much! Dale

Posted 8 Years Ago


dan

8 Years Ago

Dale, Thank you so much. Often people who have been hurt by love before tend to put up barriers, bei.. read more
Confuser

8 Years Ago

You're welcome Dan...great writing and you are right...get burnt and give up is so sad. Too many fi.. read more
summary of the poem(as per me): it's not the weight that breaks you, it's the way you carry it.

Posted 8 Years Ago


dan

8 Years Ago

Ankur, That's a very profound and true statement. Thank you for your read/review. take care...dan
Very deep thoughts. Love is patient, it waits for the walls to come down.

Posted 8 Years Ago



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