from then to now

from then to now

A Poem by dan
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an elderly couple is shattered when one of them dies...how will the survivor cope?

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the loneliness I felt long ago,

 before we met,

can’t come close to comparing to

the loneliness I am feeling

now that I’ve lost you.

 

the time passes so quickly,

the clock spins

crookedly, adapting to the empty

place in my life where you once

stood…complacent.

 

my advancing years’ crescendo

fills me not with

beautiful symphonic cacophony but

the singular wail of a

rusted saxophone.

 

growing old alone and hurt

is not the way

to end a life.

 

dan © 2015


Music: "Old and Wise," by The Alan Parsons Project

© 2015 dan


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Ya pulled at my heart strings with this one Dan!
A lovely write. :]

Posted 4 Years Ago


GreenEyedPoet

4 Years Ago

Very true, it is a sad but inevitable part of life. That's why we have to just focus the now and enj.. read more
dan

4 Years Ago

We both have medical issues and the clock is ticking...neither one of us wants the "time after..." t.. read more
GreenEyedPoet

4 Years Ago

Nah, not morbid. I'm sure lots of people feel this way.
this was a great description of the feelings that are too common nowadays. great poem and great work :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


dan

4 Years Ago

A couple begins to hear the clock ticking (for which one?) when a certain age threshold is met. A sa.. read more
my advancing years’ crescendo

fills me not with

beautiful symphonic cacophony but

the singular wail of a

rusted saxophone.

Beautiful line. I liked the rhythm and tone of the piece. Loved the finality of the last lines. Great Job

Posted 4 Years Ago


dan

4 Years Ago

People of a certain age (with a significant other) dread thinking of a day when one of the two will .. read more
Crystal Overmeyer-Birmingham

4 Years Ago

lol. No more morbid than my husband and I. We talk about dieing in passing, but i honestly think it .. read more
dan

4 Years Ago

Very well put...dan
Very nicely written. Love the comparison to music

Posted 4 Years Ago


dan

4 Years Ago

Thank you for the kind words. I've bookmarked your page and will be by soon to return the favor. (Fe.. read more
Pulling at my hearts strings Dan. Beautifully written.


Posted 4 Years Ago


dan

4 Years Ago

Ana, Long time, no hear. Hope all is fine with you. Thank you for your kind words. take care...dan
Matching Socks

4 Years Ago

You're welcome Dan, my pleasure. I am fine and life is good, thank you.
A poignant and heart felt write. Superb imagery and flow, and as I have come to recognize in your writing, there is usually a question or a statement that hooks the reader. You slam the door shut with your last stanza; a firm statement. Excellent job Dan. (hope all is well)

~peace, Todd

Posted 4 Years Ago


dan

4 Years Ago

Thank you for the kind words, Todd. Yeah, I hook 'em all like fish on a line! You have to do somethi.. read more
Heh.Heh I read this poem earlier but my attempts at commenting was thwarted by your video clip. I couldn't keep my thoughts on my comments because of the video, so I just left. But came back and looked for a place to stop the darn video. Thank goodness

I completely relate to this well-written poem. The past April I had a birthday. I turned seventy-six. How in the world have I managed to make it this far, especially given my background. But despite my two lost decades I have managed. Six years ago my wife died and I just knew I would soon follow her. You were so right when you penned . . . "growing old alone and hurt / is not the way /
to end a life."

Posted 4 Years Ago


dan

4 Years Ago

Jerry, I'm sorry you were distracted by the vid. I always figure that if it gets in the way for a re.. read more
It's good. The attached song is beautiful but it takes too much attention away from your words.

Posted 4 Years Ago


dan

4 Years Ago

What I do when I come to a review with a song attached is to listen to the song first. When it stops.. read more
Annacate

4 Years Ago

Thanks for letting me know about that. I thought you uploaded it. I'm still learning about this we.. read more
just lovely, you provided much needed insight

Posted 4 Years Ago


dan

4 Years Ago

Sometimes even insight can be overrated. But I guess that in poetry it gives readers a basis for com.. read more
This poem is very fluid, enticing the entire time.

Posted 4 Years Ago


dan

4 Years Ago

Thank you, I like to entice, and maybe do it twice. (Don't mind me I'm just a little off the wall to.. read more

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