Well. People often look back, and relive the happy moments. And some regret not catching some of those beautiful butterflies, holding a few moments of happiness, the feeling of "a job well done " fulfillment. Looking at life... Made out of those few moments, that fly away, like it was yesterday, but then again...It was years back. How quickly they seem to pass, but bearing the good and bad through them years, is challenging, and takes effort..And now imma quit writing an essay, and say: Well done.
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
Danny, Man you are wise beyond your years! You've only gone through 15 years while I've gone through.. read moreDanny, Man you are wise beyond your years! You've only gone through 15 years while I've gone through 59 of 'em, yet your review has you writing things that sound as if someone MY age wrote them, and I mean that in a GOOD way. Glad to see you are still writing, will review your latest if you send me a read request? Thank you, sir! take care...dan
and...lets not forget. in these 15 years plus a few months ... I've seen, and lived more (mostly evi.. read moreand...lets not forget. in these 15 years plus a few months ... I've seen, and lived more (mostly evil stuff that's better left home, away from here.) more than some people, who live 70+ years. and no. I'm not overdoing it, when I say that. life had it's tricks. & you either wise up in time...or it's checkmate. ;)
Interesting poem as always Dan. One thing in the wording that I am confused by, and I would love if you might explain.
"I reject the tangible
embrace the malleable"
What definitions are you using for tangible and malleable? (I'm a scientist haha and that kind of confuses me since I know the most used definitions of the words). Please explain (: Thank you!
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
When I wrote "tangible," I thought of something solid to the touch, concrete. "Malleable" was used t.. read moreWhen I wrote "tangible," I thought of something solid to the touch, concrete. "Malleable" was used to denote something that is able to be changed easily. The difference in my mind is that something that is concrete to the touch is resistant to change, hence the difference.
These may not have been the most exact uses of the words; my uses maybe twisted the language to my definitions. Call it poetic license?
I always enjoy reviews of any kind, especially the ones that challenge me. You were certainly right to question my usage of the words. I hope my explanation answered your questions. Thank you so much for the visit and review.
take care...dan
There are many days, especially since losing my mother, that I feel much older than my numerical age. I believe it is a state of mind. I enjoyed this.
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
Luna, Thank you for your review and your description of how you view age and time. I have found in m.. read moreLuna, Thank you for your review and your description of how you view age and time. I have found in my numerical years that my memory tends to gloss over many of my bad times while viewing the good with a greater clarity. Selective memory does wonders for reminiscences. Thanks again! take care...dan
Age is a number, but I believe it means nothing in terms of the way you should act. Act how you feel, not for how many numbers you have collected. Great write dan as always :)
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
I agree that age should be marked by how one feels instead of a numeral. I find as I get older (59 n.. read moreI agree that age should be marked by how one feels instead of a numeral. I find as I get older (59 now) I draw strength from my recollection of moments in my life, good and bad. Thanks so much, I am always honored by your intuitive reviews. take care...dan
Time is a gift to be used in anyway that makes us happy. Sometimes I think we try passing too much into it. I like that you have given age both a chronological aspect, but also the perpetuity of emotion and perspective. Live young-- age should settle in your bones, not your spirit.
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Amen to that. I know that it certainly is settling in MY creaky bones; turning 59 a couple of weeks .. read moreAmen to that. I know that it certainly is settling in MY creaky bones; turning 59 a couple of weeks ago added some fuel to the emotional aspect, but I don't really feel OLD, per se. Thanks, Jan, for the insightful review. take care...dan
As I've said before, Dan, I don't know anything about poetry, but I'm glad you sent me a read request for this. The music and the poetry make a very pleasant experienced. I love your contrast of the concrete number and the inflexibility of "age" combined with the ever changing quality of life, a mindset. I often find myself in a state of disbelief about my "age." I certainly don't feel that age -- except my body fails to act m mental age! Thanks for sharing this with me.
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Thank YOU for being open to my sharing. I know you are a story/chapter/book writer, and I have a har.. read moreThank YOU for being open to my sharing. I know you are a story/chapter/book writer, and I have a hard time with them due to several MH disabilities, but I'm so happy that you didn't just hit 'delete' upon reception of a poem. I love poetry because I'm able to tell stories in a finite space and time precisely because I cannot stretch an idea into story length. I really wish I could. But I give you a lot of credit from going outside of your preferred genre of writing and giving my piece a chance. Thank you so much! take care...dan
A nice way to describe age. Many times I have seen elders that have a spirit of a twenty year old, and I have seen many twenty year olds who have the old spirit of a seventy year old. Age really is just a technical fact.
Thanks for sharing :) I liked this poem very much.
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
At 59 I don't feel old, don't feel as if I'm "an elder," but don't feel as if I'm as relevant as I u.. read moreAt 59 I don't feel old, don't feel as if I'm "an elder," but don't feel as if I'm as relevant as I used to feel. I feel as if I'm about 40 maybe. And that's fine with me (actually 59 is fine, but you know what I mean). Thanks so much for the read/review. Now I'm heading over to your page to return the favor. take care...dan
Ahhh. Age and the passage of time. I only know this too well.
I hit my 40's and wondered where the hell my youth went! All my hopes and dreams, ambitions and goals all seemed to have been lost to the passing of time. Yet, in my mind, i still feel youthful, energetic, valuable and not obsolete. Then you look in the mirror and it hits you like a kick in the groin. In reality, i'm old....inside i'm young. Its one of life's great contradictions. So, we try to act our age when every tendril of our mind is telling us to act as we really feel. It is quite the conundrum.
I appreciate this piece, Dan. Age is a concrete number, but i think we need to embrace our inner youth in order to avoid becoming obsolete. Another impressive piece of work, Dan. Take care.
Doodley, Last Thursday I turned 59. Fifty-effing-NINE. But oddly enough (though my achy-breaky body .. read moreDoodley, Last Thursday I turned 59. Fifty-effing-NINE. But oddly enough (though my achy-breaky body says otherwise) I don't really feel OLD. I'm young at heart, I guess. Thank you for your review, I like your reviews so much for their detail and intuitiveness. I am very verbose when I review, so join MY club! Thanks again. take care...dan
8 Years Ago
59 huh? Well, for what's worth, Happy Birthday, Dan. I hope you had a good one! Embrace that inner y.. read more59 huh? Well, for what's worth, Happy Birthday, Dan. I hope you had a good one! Embrace that inner youth!!
8 Years Ago
I always try to maintain my youthful outlook, but don't know if I'll feel the same once I hit SIXTY!.. read moreI always try to maintain my youthful outlook, but don't know if I'll feel the same once I hit SIXTY! Thanks again, Doodley! take care...dan
this is amazing. i love this. keep up the amazing job!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Thank you, Shadowfax. Could you please send me read requests? That's the best way I can keep up with.. read moreThank you, Shadowfax. Could you please send me read requests? That's the best way I can keep up with my friends' writing so I can read and review. Thanks again. take care...dan
Well. People often look back, and relive the happy moments. And some regret not catching some of those beautiful butterflies, holding a few moments of happiness, the feeling of "a job well done " fulfillment. Looking at life... Made out of those few moments, that fly away, like it was yesterday, but then again...It was years back. How quickly they seem to pass, but bearing the good and bad through them years, is challenging, and takes effort..And now imma quit writing an essay, and say: Well done.
Posted 8 Years Ago
2 of 2 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
Danny, Man you are wise beyond your years! You've only gone through 15 years while I've gone through.. read moreDanny, Man you are wise beyond your years! You've only gone through 15 years while I've gone through 59 of 'em, yet your review has you writing things that sound as if someone MY age wrote them, and I mean that in a GOOD way. Glad to see you are still writing, will review your latest if you send me a read request? Thank you, sir! take care...dan
and...lets not forget. in these 15 years plus a few months ... I've seen, and lived more (mostly evi.. read moreand...lets not forget. in these 15 years plus a few months ... I've seen, and lived more (mostly evil stuff that's better left home, away from here.) more than some people, who live 70+ years. and no. I'm not overdoing it, when I say that. life had it's tricks. & you either wise up in time...or it's checkmate. ;)
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