picture frames (senryu)

loss of love in abstract tones

teary eyes and walls;

darkened empty picture frames

that once embraced you.

 

dan © 2016

Reviews

[Terrence Chang]

It has a very deep meaning I must say.
A memory that is slowly fading away even though it is framed. It has now earned its right to set free for better or worse.
Quite a intriguing thought you have here

[dan]

Thank you Terrence. Empty picture frames convey the notion of a lost love, memories fading to black. I appreciate your nice review. take care...dan

[Terrence Chang]

Your welcome and thank you for the appreciation of my review

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

Nice--I like this short little one...conveys a lot of emotion inside these words!
Well done.

[dan]

Thank you so much for the kind words. Please, Josie...send me some read requests? It is the only way I can keep current with my friends' reviews. Thanks again! take care...dan

[Bacchus]

Vivid pictures- when the memories are too hard to keep in frames.
It reminds me of when I found my parents wedding picture in my grandmother's nightstand after she died.
They had divorced- and it couldn't be on the wall anymore- but it still was in her heart.

[dan]

Bacchus, I am so glad my write stirred up such a touching memory for you. Thank you for your insightful review. I am heading over to your page to review one of your writes. Nice to 'meet you!' take care...dan

[Coyote Poetry]

You create sad place and visions with your words. Very nice use of the words. Thank you Dan for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[dan]

John, Thank you so much for the interpretation of my piece. Always an honor to receive your reviews. take care...dan

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Dan.

[.]

The frames hang in a state of melancholy, because they are empty of the photos of the ones we love, and which the frames long to hold.

A brilliant use of metaphor here, Dan. Even the walls cry at the loss of the photographs. Such depth of sadness in such a short form of writing. A senryu needs to really stand out, given its short structure, to make an impact on the reader, and i believe you have hit the mark in that regard with this one.
Well written, as always. Take care, and go easy on the chocolate bunnies!

[dan]

Those bunnies are MINE...get back, Doodley! Thank you for the kind words. take care...dan

[Antoñyo]

A mysterious story screams from this.
Nicely done. Thanks for sharing.

[dan]

the empty frames once held so much...the loss is so palpable. Thank you for your kind words. take care...dan

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i really like the metaphor of the walls crying because their eyes are empty of pictures...a once embrace turned lonely wall...

j.

[dan]

thank you, jacob...metaphors are not my area of expertise but I've learned some from the best! take care...dan