cracks in her glass_2

cracks in her glass_2

A Poem by dan

in mourning for lost love, he looks in the mirror for some answer


his shadows stare toward

way too many mirrors

with cracks,

sharpened to a jeweler’s point…

other glass

(dull and lifeless)

subdued and silent;

sand from a nameless beach.

his parade of (stiffened) failures

tossed down boulevards

of disrepair;

bands marching backward down-

ward, past the photos crucified into the stair-

case (overlaid by glass,)

pics of her being lazy and faded.

he glances toward each cracked

looking glass (now looking back)

and whispers a plaintive phrase,

wishing she were here


 dan © 2016

 Music: “Can’t Stand Losing You,” by The Police


© 2016 dan

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Re-written, prompted by a good friend. A good deed done and I reap the rewards. Thank you, T.

Posted 7 Years Ago

Dan, sad poem, one which most of us can find meaning in -- for the lost loves we've suffered and still mourn. As you know, I don't know anything about poetry so take the following as a grain of salt.
There were several lines that switched images and which at least for me interrupted the flow. One was "sand from a nameless beach," where you switch from the image of the broken glass to sand and a beach. The other was "with lustrous flavor…her favorite recipes" where you move from the marching band to food/recipes. The poem is lovely and lyrical.

Posted 7 Years Ago


7 Years Ago

Dan, it's not that I don't like the second version. That's absolutely not the case. Perhaps I miss.. read more

7 Years Ago

It's flawed, as are most of my writes. Thank you for the kind words. take care...dan

7 Years Ago

Join the club. I've never written anything that isn't. For once, I'd really like to actually finis.. read more
Beautiful even though always thread a magnificent emotion through your writing holds me right there and makes me wonder on the flip does one heal as such and if they do is it ever the same...beautifully emotive Dan...blessings...

Posted 7 Years Ago


7 Years Ago

Thank you Poppy. This was 100% fictional, which I believe sometimes helps me to inject more emotion .. read more
It's a very sad and painful feeling and I like the lines and words you've chosen, cracked instead of broken...
This leaves an opportunity for mending. Either the person or the relationship. Nice one dan.

Posted 7 Years Ago


7 Years Ago

Thanks so much Ana. I often find it easier to write with raw emotion when the piece is fictional (wh.. read more
Matching Socks

7 Years Ago

Dan, whenever you pop in it is always a treat because I never expect it. At your leisure. :)
Loved this, you used the word "cracked" in many intriguing ways

Posted 7 Years Ago


7 Years Ago

Adi, Thanks again. It was a relief to have finally gotten something written. Thank you so much for y.. read more

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Added on May 20, 2016
Last Updated on May 21, 2016
Tags: crack, glass, loss



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