A Winter Poem

Cinquain: poem of 5 lines with syllabic counts of 2, 4, 6, 8 and 2 respectively.... the captcha for this one is "plainish" :))))))))) gotta love it right?!

My snow

December's moon

Beleaguering too soon

the hearth that holds a fiery heat

now cold

E.

11/12/2018

Author's Note

this is a poem i submitted for an on-line poetry class ... (for beginners) ;) and this is the first Cinquaine i have written

Reviews

[Cherrie Palmer]

I never think of these style of poetry as dressed down. They are power insured.
Each word creates images while each coupling set the mood. I love what you have made.
Now, if only you could find a neighbor with a match. :)

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahaha won't choo be .....my neighbor! ;) so good to have your visit Cherrie! ... i agree .. the form insures power and/or theme ... probably why they persist over time ... top 'o the mahrnin' to ya lass! ;)
E.

[Cherrie Palmer]

I need to be cooking pies instead of reading, and a fine day to you as well.

[Einstein Noodle]

yes...Thanksgiving tomorrow ... the best celebration ever ... THANKYOU! ;)

[Cherrie Palmer]

Many blessings to you and yours.

[Mrudula Rani]

Perfectly crafted wonderful Cinquain.
Five lines, few syllables... paint dazzling pictures with perfection!

[Einstein Noodle]

that means a lot to me Mrudula ...very encouraging ... so happy it took you "there" ;)
E.

[Mrudula Rani]

It is absolutely beautiful, E.

[WChild]

Beautiful work; the juxtaposition of warmth and winters' chill are stunning- in five lines?- amazing. You make me want to try my hand at Cinquain!

[Einstein Noodle]

i hope you do Child ...they are like haiku/senryu, i think .. and give direction just by keeping to the form ... i intend to do more for sure .. please let me know when and if you post one! thanks for taking time to review my new friend .. be well .. best of the day to ya!
E.

[WChild]

Hi E!
Yes! I was immediately reminded of Haiku, but I like how the Cinquain allows for a bit more structural freedom. I'll be sure to let you know when I try my hand at it :)

[Einstein Noodle]

:) ..................

[Relic]

I really like this a lot. The feeling is there and unmistakable.

[Einstein Noodle]

something new for me...the form and making clear statements ;) so glad you enjoyed Relic .. thank you for reviewing .. it means a lot to know what people think
E.

[angel]

I've never heard of this, but yours seems nice; think I'll have a go:

A cat
with eyes half closed
Dreaming of a river
Teeming with tuna fish
He is waiting for dinnertime
With purrs.

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahaha love it...but you have one two many 6 syllable lines ;) cats are such a 'nother world ..one has to take their aloof, "who the hell are you" ,attitude with a sense of humor ..i have good friends that harbor cats ...most of them fat cats as they are spoiled beyond redemption ... and i love them from afar :) i have two very bit dogs ... together the push the 300lb. mark ;) thanks angel ... i appreciate your time
E.

[lightsong]

just few flowing words yet they hold such wistful tune, such yearning and emptiness, well done Mr. E, a poem flowing with Your own very ink, and all the nest for You in Your on-line class, I wish You all the fun.

[Einstein Noodle]

i finished the class (yeah) and had a ball....i learned lots of new "stuff" that i am trying to keep in the noodle ... thanks for taking time my friend!
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wonderfully done...and reminds me of William Carlos Williams' poem "the Widow's Lament in Springtime"--

love it...but then, i always feel "less is more"

and you do that so well here.

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks jacob .. always grateful for your visits ..and i am truly humbled by your review ... i agree ... less is more and mostly best ...surgical precision a goal to keep ... but so easy to fail at ;} we do like our own words eh!? :)))))))))))))))
E.

[J. J. Nightingale]

Hearts, hearths ..homes
Be slow in leaving there
take care of you
Be warmed with thought of
yesterday's glowing love.

Wonderful..sparks my imagination....

Jazzy

[Einstein Noodle]

i think i like the form a lot ..its almost self directive .. really happy it inspired you ... and love how "Jazzy" inspires my smile right now ;))))))))))))))
E.

[J. J. Nightingale]

Ahhhh..thanks...and you are welcome.... ♥

[sette]

i love the style the words and the message very vivid in visualizing what is it to hold someone dear especially in a cold moment like winter.. how i wish i can hold someone's hand after a long time

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you so much for reviewing sette! yes... the longing we feel then is palpable isn't it ... i am old and i remember a lot of flames that died .. in all kinds of ways ;) the real beauty is that ...it OK :))))))))))))
E.

[Cassie]

How you write that way I still do not understand, you are doing good.

[Einstein Noodle]

wow! Ms Published Author ;) from you i take that as high encouragement ... you may be sorry dear one :) i just may keep writing

[Cassie]

Hahahaha(Laughs) thank you for bringing me a smile

[Einstein Noodle]

:) .................