The Deep

The Deep

A Poem by Einstein Noodle
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this is a lipogram i wrote for a class (same class the cinquaine was written for) the lipogram, for those who are unfamiliar with, is a poem using one vowel only. i chose "E"

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"The Deep"
The endless Ether
left deep clefts                                        
heed me
keep knees free
                                     enter the descent
                                                                     Hell's decree bends the rent
See me!?
Steep we creep
Spent.
Endless Ether we flee
11/28/2018
E.

© 2019 Einstein Noodle


Author's Note

Einstein Noodle
I struggled to have a theme ... would really like to know if you have a sense of one .. :}

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It’s a different kind of creative joy when we are able to produce worthwhile expression within the limitation of format and structure. For me that’s the supreme kind of satisfaction. I read the endless twists, turns and bends as we navigate, crawl, hurtle through the all pervading ether to our ordained ends. Appreciated very much, E 💕

Posted 1 Year Ago


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DIVYA

1 Year Ago

Oh bedtime then! :)
GoodMorning hugs! And do grab a bit of sleep :))))
Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

headed that way now ;)
DIVYA

1 Year Ago

.......😉☺️😊.......



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Aha! Have just gone through dozens of your posts to find one I'd not reviewed.. feel exhausted now!

Am I allowed to borrow Sami's WOW! Apart from being form ignorant, never in a month of Sunday would I attempt such a task as you have and succeeded so brilliantly. Can understand literary explanations going over the head of someone like me.. give me simple, unstructured.. please BUT seeing the end result is an explantion in itself. Will try it but privately and discover the work involved and the success achieved by you is extraordinary. First use the chosen letter and use it intelligently, poetically and more. Thanks Sami.. but double WOW!

Posted 4 Weeks Ago


Einstein Noodle

4 Weeks Ago

oh dear Em..you are always too kind ... and you are right about this not being easy ... thank you so.. read more
emmajoy

3 Weeks Ago

Seeing one's efforts elaborate belief seems easy yet .. er.. er.. .. either enigmatic NO, can'!!!.. read more
Einstein Noodle

3 Weeks Ago

:)))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))
I was unfamiliar with lipogram... challenging. Your use of E was very well done...nicely descriptive piece Einstein

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

its certainly one of those challenging forms .. thanks for taking time LE! and i appreciate the enco.. read more
LE Berry

12 Months Ago

Very welcome Einstein...thanks for adding to my knowledge.
Great use of technique and language and a great challenge for aspiring writers, to break the rules you must know them first, Wish you were my English teacher,

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

i would have been a terrible teacher .. no doubt in my nog ... I have a BA in Music but could not re.. read more
Shazbatt969

1 Year Ago

Peace and joy, to you, E "was not intended to be a rock star, so went into construction instead" is .. read more
Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

:)))))))))))))))))))))))))))
Amazing I have yo try this. It looks like fun.
And you make it look so easy. Of course when someone is good at something it always looks easy. Wish me luck.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

Oh! not easy at all ... at least for me ... the one vowel thing is easy but trying to make it say so.. read more
Egads, Gene!
10-4, good buddy, dancin' with the Devil can sure get ya into the DEEP s..t, alright!

Mind-boggling form, My Friend, and much more challenging to accomplish than one might think. In fact, I quit teaching it, altogether, because it was so hard for me to do I didn't feel justified assigning it to students.
This is, actually, an amazingly rare Univocalic Lipogram poem, and a Pandngrammatic Lipogram is prose or poetry that uses every letter of the alphabet "except" one.
I dig the rhymes and presentation, too … quite unique and entertaining.

You never cease to amaze me.
Besides its difficulty, the most amazing thing about this piece is that you titled it and kept to the theme throughout, and it makes sense, even to ME … LOL!

Gene, I think you might be the most prolifically varied poet onsite, and never boring, I might add … LOL!
Thanks for the gin-you-wine treat! ⁓ Richard 🍃

110/100

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

damn Richard!!! my head is burting ..you are so kind with your remarks and you point out the hardest.. read more
Richard 🍃

1 Year Ago

Well, Poet,
Ya done exceptionally good on this assignment. ( A+ )
Now, go shampoo with.. read more
Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

ahahahaha ... hmmmmmmmmm haven't shampooed in weeks :{{{{{{{{{{[ !
An exceptional poem. That takes you places. Deeper, dark and descending into the pit of hell. Great images that explode inside your mind's eye on reading and exploring the images it gives you too.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

you are very kind Dawn ... the lipogram was not easy for me ... using it to say something worthwhile.. read more
Dawn

1 Year Ago

You did a wonderful job in your lipogram Einstein. I do agree digging more causes danger. :)
Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

;) ........................
Wow! very impressed with the picture you've portrayed within this poetic format.. and thanks for teaching me a new form! i'll have to give it a go.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

oh my goodness lizard! i hope it doesn't curse you :) not easy for me at all ... for a free verse pe.. read more
lizardbrain

1 Year Ago

it might force me to give at least a modicum of thought and revision to my poems that they currently.. read more
I fear any sort of descent ~ especially into the unknown. Get the feeling of a fearful potholer ~ the fealr of being trapped! Your piece though short tells a lot! Cleverly put.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

hey kitty! thanks for checking this one out ... i feel pretty gratified all those things came across.. read more
kitty

1 Year Ago

The extraordinary is always a fascinating subject. We wonder too about the supernatural!
This is clever and witty and yet........................................................Enjoyed it but simply too difficult to emulate!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

thanks always for your time John ... sure appreciate it ... not an easy form for sure ... would not .. read more
This is fun i must try doing one of these when my brain is functioning properly.. (once or twice a month me thinks) death waits for no man nor bunny my friend :) and in my case he visits quite often:( brilliantly composed as usual. thanks for the thought food!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

its (death) a faithful and constant companion isn't it ;) ...at any age :( ... the form was definite.. read more

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