Pronto

Pronto

A Poem by R.E. Ray
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Experimenting again with some idiomatic language.

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In a hilltop antebellum house, 
behind ornate ancient oak, 
her grandfather’s musty library, 
she stretched in dusty shadows, 
long fingers on his leather spine, 
an enigmatic, dog-eared novel. 

Pausing in the moonlight, 
she heard his words, a twang 
uniquely, genuinely Southern. 
She smiled, seeing his impish grin, 
a countenance that revealed little 
until she read his sui generis poetry. 

On tiptoes, silver ballet slippers off, 
tucking between Joseph Jacobs 
and The Brothers Grimm, 
thirteen shelves up, relics too, 
once embraced and treasured, 
pronto, she put him in his place. 


© 2019 R.E. Ray


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Reading your work is blissful. Your imagery is smoothly flowing as I read the words. This drew me to the exact location of that old library and the feeling of browsing through the antique books and drifting to the past happy memories of the one you love.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

R.E. Ray

4 Weeks Ago

Thank you, Markus. I appreciate your kind review.



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Beautiful job weaving 3 of my favorite ideas -- bringing a setting such as "the south" alive, being among books/words/stories (I could feel this library), and writers who can deliver a convincing & judicious dialect using dialogue thru-out a story. Your writing is very lyrical & sends the reader into a wash of sensations (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Actually I liked the imagery you projected, reminds me of those old authors.

Posted 4 Weeks Ago


I really enjoyed this. The scene is wonderfully imagined and I found myself there, snooping through the cold treasures. This poem has abundant charm.

Posted 4 Weeks Ago


Hi, I apologize in advance because not often enough on this website do people actually leave criticism but i am going to. Please recognize that this is all subjective and my opinion truly means nothing. To start I'd like to say I love the imagery of this poem, it truly does paint a picture. Descriptions such as "dog-eared novel" are captivating and thoughtful. But I do think this poem has a lot of forced words, feels almost like a thesaurus was used every few lines to throw in a big sounding word. I really think you could benefit from using simpler language and letting your poetry really shine. Your talent shows none the less, great work!

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

R.E. Ray

4 Weeks Ago

Thank you for thoughtful, constructive review.
Reading your work is blissful. Your imagery is smoothly flowing as I read the words. This drew me to the exact location of that old library and the feeling of browsing through the antique books and drifting to the past happy memories of the one you love.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

R.E. Ray

4 Weeks Ago

Thank you, Markus. I appreciate your kind review.
How lovely this is....remembering a grandfather through his poetry and the books he loved. The nostalgia is tangible in this poem and the imagery transported me to the Southern Plantation. I enjoyed it. Lydi**

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

R.E. Ray

4 Weeks Ago

Thanks very much, Lydi.

your fingers and my tongue find their way around and through idiomatic language with consummate ease methinks.. Something a bit different and refreshingly so....thoroughly enjoyed my friend & true...

Neville

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

R.E. Ray

4 Weeks Ago

Thanks for another flattering review, Neville.
Neville Pettitt

3 Weeks Ago

pleasure sir and true...
your imagery is really nice and invokes a sense of nostalgia! really enjoyed it :)

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

R.E. Ray

4 Weeks Ago

Thank you for reading and sharing your thoughts.

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Added on June 20, 2019
Last Updated on June 29, 2019
Tags: Idioms, idiomatic, poem, poetry, free verse, novel, stories, literature, fairy tales


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