Greetings

Greetings

A Poem by R.E. Ray

Greetings

 

You latched your door.

I don’t dare knock or clutch

or shake the knob.

I assume you’re slumbering

or they snatched you in the dark.

 

Silence and shadows ooze

below the scuffed foot rail.

I smell your carpet flowers,

Sweet Alyssum ~

or the breath of absence,

 

insinuating you’ve gone away

until the pale petals crawl

the window, the yellow glow again?

 

The moon keeps your secrets.

The sun denies knowing you.

© 2020 R.E. Ray


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My first thought when I read this is that it is a mix of Stephen King and LM Montgomery. I’m never sure if LM Montgomery is a familiar name to men—she wrote Anne of Green Gables and other books in that same vein, and these were the only books I read as a girl and young woman. She offered, to the modern consciousness, an escape into beauty and simplicity. A place where problems are solvable and even the abandoned triumph with the love of community.

So, you have this sense of the person choosing to remain separate and also the speaker here outside wondering what that person is doing. Like some of King’s more cerebral characters, the question becomes—why are you hiding. That dynamic provides and interesting backdrop. The details you’ve chosen to include make it feel as though neither person is certain of the why or way forward, but that there is a long way to go before resolution is found.

It’s mysterious—like the person hiding, I suppose. But maybe the speaker is hiding too, just not acknowledging that. If someone is watching alone from the outside, seems as though they are wrapped up in the mysterious solitude as well. An interesting poem, I like the feeling it gives off. A bit unsettling but could also offer something of quiet resolution and thoughtfulness. Which isn’t necessarily a negative state.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

R.E. Ray

2 Weeks Ago

Eilis, thank you for this review. I was hoping you'd read this one. I must admit I've never read a.. read more



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My first thought when I read this is that it is a mix of Stephen King and LM Montgomery. I’m never sure if LM Montgomery is a familiar name to men—she wrote Anne of Green Gables and other books in that same vein, and these were the only books I read as a girl and young woman. She offered, to the modern consciousness, an escape into beauty and simplicity. A place where problems are solvable and even the abandoned triumph with the love of community.

So, you have this sense of the person choosing to remain separate and also the speaker here outside wondering what that person is doing. Like some of King’s more cerebral characters, the question becomes—why are you hiding. That dynamic provides and interesting backdrop. The details you’ve chosen to include make it feel as though neither person is certain of the why or way forward, but that there is a long way to go before resolution is found.

It’s mysterious—like the person hiding, I suppose. But maybe the speaker is hiding too, just not acknowledging that. If someone is watching alone from the outside, seems as though they are wrapped up in the mysterious solitude as well. An interesting poem, I like the feeling it gives off. A bit unsettling but could also offer something of quiet resolution and thoughtfulness. Which isn’t necessarily a negative state.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

R.E. Ray

2 Weeks Ago

Eilis, thank you for this review. I was hoping you'd read this one. I must admit I've never read a.. read more

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