FORBIDDEN

A woman's curiosity is always her downfall...

     This strange husband of hers with the blue beard had forbidden Marta to enter this room, so naturally she had to enter it.  The first thing she saw was female heads lining the wall. Horrified, she turned to run--but her curiosity was overpowering, and she had to examine them. Each head, she noted, was set in its own niche with a name underneath. Then she saw an empty space…and the name Marta in bold letters under it. “Oh no!” she gasped.

 

     “Oh yes,” growled a voice behind her. Marta whirled to see her husband approaching…and the axe he carried.

Reviews

[stansg]

Hahaha. This is amazing. Too good. I cant find words to describe how much i liked it. Its human nature to covet what is forbidden, started right from Adam and Eve; but poor Marta she would never have thought that it would be the last time she'd have that feeling.
Absolutely brilliant.

[Marie]

Thank you. Actually it's a retelling of "Bluebeard." Women seem a lot more curous than men.

[hellenmasido]

This made me smile. Strange, I always thought a story had to be longer to be good. Proved me wrong and gave a challenge!

[Marie]

Thanks. I am very much into flash fiction and micro fiction. On W/C longer stories don't get much attention

[SquinklaPsyOps]

I like the structure of the poem and the terrifying message that we really dont know persons and is good to choose our companions wisely.

[Nila M.]

Cozy and creepy at the same time, I loved this!

[Marie]

Thank you.

[Will Neill]

Sometimes its better to keep you're nose out of things.nice story.
Will

[Marie]

Eve, Pandora, they all do the same things.

[Woody]

I believe this is your shortest story yet, Marie. I couldn't add a single word if I tried. perfectly told.
amazing storytelling!

[Marie]

Thanks. As far as regular stories go, it is pretty short, though I do a drabble from time to time.

[wordman]

curiosity killed the cat marie,a interesting write

[Archia]

I saw below that this was based on 'Bluebeard', which I haven't really read, but when I was reading this what came to my mind was a different story which had been based on 'Bluebeard' which I can't remember the name of now but I think you did such a good job at basing it from that. I think that in a couple of paragraphs you pretty much sum up the whole story with the tension and everything. It was really good.

[Marie]

Thanks. I think a lot of stories have been based on this old fairy tale.

[ANTO]

Hey this is brilliant Marie - I love it!
The trophy wives having their trophy heads displayed like the African hunters kills. A real sparkler here Marie - witty and well told - class!

[Jimmy Yetts]

A collector, of sorts.
Maybe all any of the women ever did was enter a room Bluebeard didn't want them to enter.
Women! They gotta go messin' in the man cave!
Guess Marta is going to end up being just another "trophy wife."
Great bit of flash fiction, Marie.

[Marie]

Thanks. "Trophy Wife" would have been an excellent title for this.