I lost You

I lost You

A Poem by Heather Clayton

Smoke bellows
a shy girl
whispers to her friend
a nightmare.

I saw you
one more turn 
the pain unbearable
one time ago.

Remember me
how I remember you
you lost your life
How I wish I were you.

© 2012 Heather Clayton


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very nicely expressed.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

So short, yet it says so much. Sad. Chilling. Emotional. Touching. Thanks for sharing.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is a chilling write full of so many emotions. It gave many interpretations, whatever it is you wrote about it beautifully.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Thats full of emotions , althouth the words are simple , I can feel there is so much pain behind it ....

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This one is pretty simple (obviously) but made think deeply, which I think the poem was ment to do! Beautiful!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is a very chilling & mysterious writing bit.
I read it over multiple times & each time a new interpretation came to mind.
1.) Murder
2.) Suicide
3.) Abortion
4.) Miscarriage

It made me think about all the possibilities. Great word bit~

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on May 18, 2012
Last Updated on May 22, 2012
Tags: loss, girl, nightmare, pain, remember

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Heather Clayton
Heather Clayton

Spring, TX



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Hello, I love writing and have quite an imagination. Usually my writings are short stories and also I do some poetry. I'm 35 and I love animals, music and writing/reading. I studied creative writing a.. more..

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