the reason i left

the reason i left

A Poem by just take a breath

fragile fingers, i held your hand

slowly, i dropped them

hoping to god, you'll understand

why i did.


fragile steps, i walked away

temporarily leaving

wishing on stars, you'll be ok

in the end.


fragile tears, fell from my eyes

catching my breath

letting you live, make up your mind

that's why i left.


that's the reason i left.

© 2011 just take a breath

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add acoustic guitar and there wont be a dry eye in the room.
Touching work.

Posted 12 Years Ago

there is a very serious tone of regret in this poem, a smooth rhyme scheme, and a solid ending. very inspireing work. thank you for shareing! :)
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Posted 12 Years Ago

nice to see you writing again-- the first stanza was the best.

Posted 12 Years Ago

Great poem!
The first few lines were great :)

Posted 12 Years Ago

A very moving poem, written with perfect flow, excellent:)

Posted 12 Years Ago

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Added on September 9, 2011
Last Updated on September 9, 2011


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