Shiny Yellow Metal

This poem might sound really wrong. Notice that what I write is not just what I think. I used the disposition of an Italian sonnet - again, I'm trying yo imprint symbolism in the form. Clue: rhymes.

A golden ring might have been cast in brass

To less attentive eyes for gold may pass

As bright and rich a shade as that it has

And bitten, it will bend, if right in class

 

Still, looks and features similar aside,

‘Tis common, among jewels it does not bide

It works and it is worked upon with pride

But all grandeur has been to brass denied

 

Amazing things, amazing, will be made

But none of them for gold someone will trade

Alas, they’ll make their maker be a jade

 

With effort brass and gold will look the same

With effort and lack of knowledge to name

With effort, all it gets is half the fame

Author's Note

What of the form-symbolism can you find? What is the feeling?

Reviews

[John]

I'm not generally good with poems but I really enjoyed yours :3

[Ilan Cruz]

I'm smart and I've got it.

[Ilan Cruz]

I totally agree with me!