I was once a hardworking man.

I was once a hardworking man.

A Poem by Chandler bing

I was once a hardworking man

I was once a hardworking man,
It wasn't too long ago,
When I did all sorts of thing at one go,
But now I feel meagre and exhausted,
Not wanting to face my present,
I remembered my past.

Past

I used to cut wood from the trees,
And sell them in a nearby street,
I also worked in a paper mill,
Earning my way through hefty bills,
After slogging all day,
I would hike back all the way.

In the morning,
Rejuvenated from yesterday's batter,
I would get ready for today's battle,
Again slogging all the day,
I would hike all the way.

In the morning,
When the dawn would break over,
I would find my self in a clover,
Satisfied with my life as it was,
I would pray to god.

© 2014 Chandler bing


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This poem is very beautifully structured and i love the rhythm the selected rhyme creates throughout. Perhaps could have been more balanced in description but overall the imagery it created is compelling.

Today is my first say on writers cafe, and i was wondering if you could perhaps review my first piece on here?
Once again, beautiful poem!

Posted 8 Years Ago


wow! this is great! i love how appealing this poem is and to me it reminds me of poems you hear as a child, the ones you never forget!! i think it is the rhythm, the pace. it brings back my childhood from when i was little little as i'm only 15. I love your vivid imagery, it welcome the reader, and the story behind it, great job!! :D

Posted 10 Years Ago


I feel like this poem could go on! Perhaps, there is more to write? This piece gives me an image of an older man who is retired now, and reflecting on the hard work he's done throughout his life. I can picture him sitting there in contemplation of the hard earned calluses on his hands, and feeling satisfied once just to work. I really enjoyed this image, but I feel like it needs an end! Regardless, this is very well written!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Chandler bing

10 Years Ago

Thank you! I guess in a few days I would continue this one .
it was engrossing nd full of sense i just wish u to add few more lines i loved this piece

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chandler bing

10 Years Ago

yeah i know someone else also told me it was incomplete anyways thanks for reviewing..
sakshi arora

10 Years Ago

ur welcome
story of content man who with time if loses contentment then the work seems unpleasant drudgery.

nicely written.

best wishes

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chandler bing

10 Years Ago

thank u so much maam..i hope u continue reading my poems n give ur wise opinion:)
Prritiy

10 Years Ago

you are welcome :)
Reads like a kind of ode to the proverbial Everyman. I was happy to read the sense of contentment in the final stanza. It's like an individual proclaiming pride in his work, and is undaunted by whether or not anyone else notices. Very nicely done.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Chandler bing

10 Years Ago

didn't expect anyone would notice thanks man you made my day :)
kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

You're very welcome :)
A really nice, I could picture the hard working man.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Chandler bing

10 Years Ago

thanks for being so appreciative about my work :)
This was a good read. Thank you for sharing your well written poem. xo Winter

Posted 10 Years Ago


Chandler bing

10 Years Ago

thank you sister :)
Stagnation my friend is what diseases the soul , so keep looking for things which challenge you and make you grow.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Chandler bing

10 Years Ago

Yeah I know it does indeed thank you sir :)

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