In the Fullness of.....

In the Fullness of.....

A Poem by Roland Petrov
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This is my attempt at another poetic genre by Richard: the diminishing hexaverse.

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The clock chimes again

(timeless universe).

Time is short and then

we suffer the curse:

running out of verse.


Seasoned with time,

it's on my plate:

fragile, sublime,

I know its fate.


What I know:

When I go,

Reaper? No.


Rather

Father


Time.

© 2015 Roland Petrov


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Roland,
This is an excellent effort, My Friend, fraught with insight, wisdom, philosophy, and understanding … all, in spot-on counts, rhymes, smooth flow, and great word-choices.

It amazes me the potential talent on this site stuck in the same old forms and genre … a good poet should be able to write in any form; for, as in music, there is a perfect note and melody to express emotion and mood, thus, it is the same in poetry and its cornucopia of styles and forms.

Consider thinking about working on the punctuation and resisting beginning every line with an unnecessary capital … it becomes confusing at times, where one thought/line/meaning ends and another begins. In the sense that music needs notes, bars, repeats, clefs, sharps, flats, etc; to guide the musician, poetry and grammar needs proper punctuation and capitalization to suitably guide the reader through a writing's complications of nuances, timbre, moment, emotion, inferences, meanings, etc; and what is is the author's real intent is.

Brilliant done, Roland, and thank you again for the honorable mention … no more "Rascal" … now, it is simply ⁓ Richard

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Roland Petrov

8 Years Ago

Thank you, Richard! I got rid of the Rascal and added punctuation.
Richard🖌

8 Years Ago

Thanks, guy! : )
Richard🖌

8 Years Ago

Looks super, Roland … way to go!



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This is wonderful Roland. Sometimes the constraints of a particular form, result in marshalling and presenting an idea or a thought in it's best guise. And this is a great example.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Roland,
This is an excellent effort, My Friend, fraught with insight, wisdom, philosophy, and understanding … all, in spot-on counts, rhymes, smooth flow, and great word-choices.

It amazes me the potential talent on this site stuck in the same old forms and genre … a good poet should be able to write in any form; for, as in music, there is a perfect note and melody to express emotion and mood, thus, it is the same in poetry and its cornucopia of styles and forms.

Consider thinking about working on the punctuation and resisting beginning every line with an unnecessary capital … it becomes confusing at times, where one thought/line/meaning ends and another begins. In the sense that music needs notes, bars, repeats, clefs, sharps, flats, etc; to guide the musician, poetry and grammar needs proper punctuation and capitalization to suitably guide the reader through a writing's complications of nuances, timbre, moment, emotion, inferences, meanings, etc; and what is is the author's real intent is.

Brilliant done, Roland, and thank you again for the honorable mention … no more "Rascal" … now, it is simply ⁓ Richard

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Roland Petrov

8 Years Ago

Thank you, Richard! I got rid of the Rascal and added punctuation.
Richard🖌

8 Years Ago

Thanks, guy! : )
Richard🖌

8 Years Ago

Looks super, Roland … way to go!
Hey, Roland, I just composed (and might post) something on time. Bravo, for attempting another genre (something I'l be daunted to attempt) and for creating a complete, yet tantalizing poem. The end kept teasing me (in a way good way, of course). I had to give my imagination a hitch there.


Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Roland Petrov

8 Years Ago

We are bound by time, and yet the universe is timeless. There is no grim reaper; we just give in to .. read more
There's a lot going on here in a small space, a great condensed idea that lost nothing during its conversion to a poem. Really enjoyed this.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I think this is your best stab at this (difficult) form. The first stanza is a little forced in places, although the syllable count is fine, for me it would be better if it was metrically sound. I know you may not even have attempted to match trochee for trochee, dactyl for dactyl. The content is excellent as always. The clock is running for us all.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Roland Petrov

8 Years Ago

Can you rewrite the first stanza for me? I'd be interested in your take. You are one of the writers .. read more
Nomenklatura

8 Years Ago

I'd spend a lot longer on doing this, except I think you'd like to try it out yourself. The way I've.. read more
oooh genius!! never heard of this. running out of time? well done, Poet.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Roland Petrov

8 Years Ago

Shukran, Habibi! Check out the poem Your Sweet Rain by Rascal. He does this with ten verses! He also.. read more

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Tags: death, fate, time, timeless, Father Time, diminishing hexaverse

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Roland Petrov
Roland Petrov

Desert Hot Springs, CA



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