Stuff Me Full.

Stuff Me Full.

A Poem by RonnieBreight

shove it all in.

as far as possible.

 

cram it with empty words.

and lost promises.

 

stitch it with pitiful attempts.

and chocolate pudding.

 

color it a bright shade of yellow.

to bring out the happiness that isn't there.

 

send it into the world.

 

see how long until the box breaks,

and the stitches rip.

 

and your soul is poured out for everyone to walk on.

© 2010 RonnieBreight


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Nice! I liked this a lot. I thought it was great how simple the poem was, yet how deep and endless the meaning behind the words were. I loved your unique style of writing, and found the whole concept behind your piece really captivating. The imagery that you created evoked a lot of memories for me, in particular the fourth stanza about the paint. Great work! :)
~PaperHearts

Posted 11 Years Ago


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Simple, but amazing :) I loved this!

Posted 9 Years Ago


interesting word curvatures..

Posted 10 Years Ago


I think that you don't need periods at the end of every line. It doesn't really make sense the way it is. I like the lines: see how long until the box breaks,/ and the stitches rip. It was a great poem.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Oh and I love the title! :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


This is great - and so true! What we do to ourselves to avoid what we don't want to know or confront never ends well. Great poem.

Posted 10 Years Ago


I loved this, you really depict how we cover things up and act like everythings as good and pretty as rainbows, hah, but its true, you cant hold it in forever, eventually you'll snap, great job :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


I think simple and honest poems usuaully end up being my favorite kinds, and you managed to make both of those words describe this piece of writing. You're writing about some things that most people feel at some point, so that always makes for a good read when a reader and writer connect.

Posted 10 Years Ago


nicee, very interesting way of looking at it. great write xD

Posted 10 Years Ago


i really liked this, short and to the point
i liked the bit about the pudding

Posted 10 Years Ago


I'll be honest, but the title and first two lines gave me the really wrong idea. And fine! I'm a perv but that's the first thing that went through my mind. But past that I saw it wasn't and actually laughed in relief. Anyways I loved the poem!

Posted 10 Years Ago



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Added on May 11, 2010
Last Updated on October 17, 2010
Tags: lost, promises, pitiful, attemps, yellow, happiness, stitches, ripping, breaking, crying, depressed, waiting, hoping, never, seeing, nothing, is, ever, there, give, up

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RonnieBreight
RonnieBreight

Spokane, WA



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