Micro Poetry

Micro Poetry

A Poem by Roopal
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Some memories you just can't erase.

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That June we held hands, and promised you and me, we will make a home our own, like our sandcastle at the sea

© 2013 Roopal


Author's Note

Roopal
It's just a random micro-poetry. I might add some more lines later. :) Please do leave suggestions :)

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i don't want more lines, and for this reason...you leave this with a sense of the abstract.

the ending could just indicate a memory of how it all got started, the relationship, the promises of the home etc.

but also it could indicate a fleeting fancy...something talked about that was knocked down with the tide of years...sandcastles are beautiful but don't last.

and this has such beauty in the short space of it...

often times less is more in poetry, and this is such a good example of that.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Roopal

6 Years Ago

i'm honored. this is such a big compliment. thank you so much :) :)
my father writes such 4 li.. read more



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sweet poem. You surely are in love :-)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Then july came and the promise left with the wind
August came and the sandcastle was no longer there

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like it , this is the type of phrase that lets the mind run its course, and makes the reader really think on what should be next... that being said I dont think u should add anything, its beautiful the way it is... In those 4 lines u said enough to last a lifetime, and forces us as the readers to use our imagination and fill in the blanks, great work

Posted 6 Years Ago


Roopal

6 Years Ago

thank you so much.. you are a generous reviewer :) :)
i liked your piece short and sweet.romantic indeed

Posted 6 Years Ago


Roopal

6 Years Ago

Thank you for the kind review. :)
I feel like this is something I'd find in one of those summer anniversary cards, it's really quite lovely and I actually enjoy the title as well.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Roopal

6 Years Ago

Thanks a lot... :) :) :)
awww this is a little pretty one.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Roopal

6 Years Ago

Thank you Peter :)
short and sweet.
fantastic.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Roopal

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much Richard . :)
Superb, Defined with love.. Sandcastle and love what a thought flow...
Wonderfully written Roopal... It's June - and its raining all over... so we have to be very much sure... Sandcastle will stay stiff :P

Good One :)
Loved it small and better bite ;)

Singh :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


Roopal

6 Years Ago

Sandcastles often get carried away with the waves during high tide, I wish these rains just don't ad.. read more
Vikrantsingh

6 Years Ago

Վ̶օ̶մ̶'̶ɾ̶ҽ̶ ̶ա̶ҽ̶Ӏ̶ϲ̶օ̶ʍ̶ҽ̶ :)
this is so sweet...one of the best micro poetry I have read...Rose

Posted 6 Years Ago


Roopal

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much Rose, I feel honored. :) :)
One word: Awesome...:)

Posted 6 Years Ago


Roopal

6 Years Ago

thank you so much. :)
Sami Khalil

6 Years Ago

My pleasure...:)

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Tags: Love, Memories, June

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Roopal
Roopal

Lucknow, Northern, India



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