Micro Poetry

Some memories you just can't erase.

That June we held hands, and promised you and me, we will make a home our own, like our sandcastle at the sea

Author's Note

It's just a random micro-poetry. I might add some more lines later. :) Please do leave suggestions :)

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i don't want more lines, and for this reason...you leave this with a sense of the abstract.

the ending could just indicate a memory of how it all got started, the relationship, the promises of the home etc.

but also it could indicate a fleeting fancy...something talked about that was knocked down with the tide of years...sandcastles are beautiful but don't last.

and this has such beauty in the short space of it...

often times less is more in poetry, and this is such a good example of that.

[Roopal]

i'm honored. this is such a big compliment. thank you so much :) :)
my father writes such 4 line poems, i got inspired by him.

[Saumya]

i really enjoyed this....!!
well done..!!
i must say, the image is beautiful....!!!

[Roopal]

thank you. I'm happy that you enjoyed it. :)

[Saumya]

highly welcomed, dear...!!!
:)

[Coyote Poetry]

Beautiful words and photo. When two people find peace and happiness. It is a good day. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Roopal]

thank you very much . :) :)

[zainul]

Awesome!

[Roopal]

thank you. reviews mean so much to me. so encouraging. :)

[zainul]

Hi Roopal,
I thought a micro review would be appropriate for your micro poetry.
Your smile is a treasure.
Keep on smiling yourself and make us smile again and again.
Best luck!
Zainul

[Roopal]

thank you :) good luck to you too :)

[zainul]

You are welcome :)

[Onku Ghosh]

It began very well, but ended suddenly.So you must add a few more lines.

[Roopal]

yea... i will add some more lines. thank you. :)

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

Good write... some things are best said with few words.

[Roopal]

thank you :) :)

[prashant harsh]

its good lookout for for example around you and try to work on dem :)

[Roopal]

i sure will. thanx for lending me your time :)