After Hours

After Hours

A Poem by Rick Puetter


 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

After Hours


Lamp-glow glints off ‘ street


     Bar lights dark--all silent now


          Homeless pull tight sheets

 

 


©2011 Richard Puetter

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Photographer: Chuckoutrearseats.  Licensed for use under a Creative Common Attribution-ShareAlike 2.0 Generic license.  This photo was taken on March 9, 2010 in Hendon, Sunderland, England, GB, using a Sony DSC-S930.  The original image can be seen at:

http://www.flickr.com/photos/[email protected]/4420456084/sizes/o/in/photostream/

© 2020 Rick Puetter


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This haiku is all the more poignant during the pandemic. The bar lights are dark, but being homeless is even worse. Did you mean to use the apostrophe between "off" and "street"? Was "a" the omission? Even if, not sure you need it. Hope you and yours are fine.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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This haiku is all the more poignant during the pandemic. The bar lights are dark, but being homeless is even worse. Did you mean to use the apostrophe between "off" and "street"? Was "a" the omission? Even if, not sure you need it. Hope you and yours are fine.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

a rather barren, cold and bleak view of the have nots comparable to the more fortunate which have..a powerflul haiku which speaks volumes ..thanks for this entry into my contest..nice work!

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Is this a senryu? It's wonderful. Efficiently describing the whole scene, that's why I love this form. Very well penned.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Rick Puetter

5 Years Ago

Hi Zahra, I guess I would tend to classify this as a haiku rather than senryu because of the juxtapo.. read more
An excellent poem, Japanese in structure, but I couldn't say what type (senyru?) but you said a lot in a small space, the picture helped, it doesn't look like San Diego though lol it looks like England. My favourite line is the first. Enjoying your work, more reviews incoming.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Samuel Jack

7 Years Ago

Just noticed the info on the photo
Rick Puetter

7 Years Ago

Hi Samuel,

Thanks once again for your review. Very best regards.

Rick
Well Döne! Pen On..

Posted 7 Years Ago


Something sad yet serene about a city winding down for the night. You've captured that so perfectly here.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I just stumbled upon this... and I stared at these lines for half a minute which is odd because they are just 3 lines,,, I realize how much you can say in few words... You paint a picture of a world that is detached from out secluded, cushioned lives and the enormity of this expressed in just a few words leaves you dazed... I liked this so very much :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like how much it captures the city atmospher late at night, when everything's died down. And I also enjoyed how it showed various aspects of it, so gave a full view.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lovely writing and the picture is a wonderful addition. The imagery that comes to mind is a bitter cold, windy evening where all are snuggled into whatever warmth they can find for the night.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

very peaceful, like an intermission in between busy loud and big daytime life of the city. a very relaxing scene. like a mirror to describing animals in the wild resting before the next day of life. the city dies and is resurrected every day you could say.
no spelling errors (as usual you bore editors haha just kidding :D)
and incredible word choice.
very short, to the point. most of you work is long (but in the best way haha) this is a nice piece, i could see it being the caption for a painting or possibly this very picture. thank you for sharing friend :)

-S.B.-

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Rick Puetter
Rick Puetter

San Diego, CA



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